A Rose Apart
A Poem by Po3tByH3art
Lonely rose in search of love just like humans.
The lonely rose that was left undead is now dead. Do to the carelessness and unwanted ways as it bled. Tears of what seemed to be watering. Leaving paths opened for drowning. In search of love and growth but instead found nothing. Kept away from the ones who cared and was found dying instead of living. Rose that cried for help but nobody to grow next to. This life of nature is just a way of showing this rose could be you..
© 2012 Po3tByH3art
Author's Note
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Love & support would appreciate it! :)
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Reviews
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Please know that I mean none of the following comments with any disrespect of intentions of being hateful. I am just trying to help you as a writer. Personally this is my least favorite of your works. I feel like the poem was rushed and you didn't know how to finish it. I see the connection you are making from people to the rose however it was a weak connection. There needs to be more detail and more emtion behind this piece. The writing itself was pretty nice, but not really effective. I love where you are going with the idea just add more to it. Make me feel what you are trying to write. Though it was interesting how you attempted to personify the rose, saying it bled and crying, and such. This has the potential to be a GREAT piece but I feel like it needs some work before it hits that greatness. But much love
Posted 12 Years Ago
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Added on August 18, 2012
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Po3tByH3artMonticello, NY
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My name Is Jorge I am 22 years old. I have been writing Poetry since the 7th grade which is about 10 years but on and off until about 3 years ago since then been writing alot lately to free my mind. I.. more..
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