Four Piece Portrait

A poem detailing a broken heart through 4 paintings......

FOUR PIECE PORTRAIT 

 

Human’s aren’t always aware of their true feelings,

Until a heart is shattered like a crumbling ceiling,

Animalistic notion can leave you with no words to describe,

An unbearable situation and emotions you can’t hide…

 

I was once told in a mix of truth and lies,

That one should show no love, because that’s rule number five

Love will get you killed and leave you yearning to survive,

But I gave you my love…And here I am, still alive…

 

Walking into a scattered room

Dripping with passion and despair

Portraits of 4 men in separate worlds

Blood brothers with a similar affair

 

On the left side of eternity,

With a broken harp upon the stairs

One plays his pain through music

With no doubts, regrets or cares

 

On the right side of emotion,

An empty void left to be

Staring deep into a mist of devotion,

The second finds nothing here to see

 

Above a hurricane of fear

The third hangs with no control

But in the grasps of his arms

the sight of trust he seems to hold

 

The fourth, the youngest of course

Below a halo of remorse

Whispers “Love sweet love”

Not for fashion or for show

But simply just because…

 

A story of four souls

In separate worlds of meaningful conclusion

Once stood strong and steadfast

Aware of true untouched love

With no fairytale illusions

 

Take the harp, the void less stare,

The grasp of trust, sweet love to share

 

Four brothers torn apart

by women with whom their love they shared

Together ride a horseless cart unable to depart

Give meaning and connotation to the broken pieces of my heart......

Reviews

[Siena - Silent Awakenin..]

Wow, this really made my day. I love how you write so smoothly... esp with the rhyme, it sets such a steady beat to the poem, and also makes us respect you and your writing more. I expect everyone will interpret this poem in different ways, but for me... when i read it, i didnt even notice my phone beep. Wow your grasp on the reader is unexpected and so positive. Thanks for uploading this to share with me. Stunning.

[A Black Rose]

This is Beautiful! You have a gift. Keep writing.

[Deandra Dawn]

I love this. You did an amazing job and had me from start to finish. Very very well done.

[MOON]

Beautifully expressed, love the teacher

[ThomasHinyard]

I love how you take us on this trip. It's like walking into an art gallery and watching these four portraits that you talk about. I imagine it as a first hand experience, without words, just letting whatever we are watching become the speaker.
Your first two lines:

"Human’s aren’t always aware of their true feelings,
Until a heart is shattered like a crumbling ceiling"

These grabbed me the most. They rhyme together and it is certainly the truth that can be applicable to many people who go through these emotions.

:)

[.]

You effortless rhyme scheme lends perfectly to the lost and betrayal of love..four aspects of love brought together seamlessly..havent ever learn those rules ...luckily for me..and anyway rules are there to be broken :)

[wordplay29]

Nicely written ..also, very sad when a woman could actually tear apart brothers like that. Some men deserve to loose all their senses because the lack of control for women. Some women deserve loneliness forever.

[WhiteWillow]

A wonderful insight into the many facets of love. Beautifully written!

[Zexter]

Great work, I like your opinions on love, freshly cynical and I'd have to agree with you!
Keep it up

[Vinod Kumar U K]

Widely reviewed the structure if life tree, beautiful and great lines..