Bottle Fairy

This poem actually makes perfect sense, honestly.

Dance bottle fairy

Green wings all aflutter

We need not be wary

Our dancing won’t stutter

 

Dance bottle fairy

For the Frenchman’s green hour

Your footsteps won’t tarry

My heartbeat won’t sour

 

Dance bottle fairy

From the glass reservoir

As fingertips marry

In magnetic fermoir

 

Dance bottle fairy

While the sugar-spoon dries

As you leave me airy

With illicit goodbyes  

Reviews

[A.r. Bazian]

good god!
i Loved it!
the flow is amazing, and the mix of structure... and combination of eras in a very heart reaching piece of art...
amazing... deep and hopeful... its kind of the pieces one would enjoy reading while disputing their deepest and most complex consoled mischiefs; something to give me hope and breath such light melodies in the depths of my being!
this piece made me rejoice with such sweet sorrow...
i guess thats how i felt... i think an utterly happy person would enjoy it very much as well, but in a totally different flow of feeling...
me its like Zorba dancing the pain away!
the structure is simple, but the diction is quite complex and imagery is all so deep!
i'm astonished by the fact that i am to read a modern day piece with much medieval influence, and still enjoy a relentless and unstoppable flow of both rhyme and emotion!
i have no idea what was in your head while you wrote this... but my God was it something!
bravoo!!!

[Jai Garg]

You seem to have the spirit dancing; and the goodbyes in the end when it remains no more.....illicit? hahahahahahahahahahahahahaha

[Lorraine]

I'm not really sure if it made sense to me, sort of yes, sort of no. But anyways, the flow is still very nice and the imagery is well delivered. Somehow it reads to me as though it has a deeper meaning, but somehow it sounds just like a plain poem about a fairy randomly doing whatever. I must be crazy.

Keep Writing. ^___^

[Miss Coral]

Beautiful!
I lived the rhythm and the imagery.. wonderful piece!!

Great job!

[Kon™]

It does make perfect sense, while at the same time it doesn't... does that make sense? Anyhoo, I love it in this strange, twisted way.... i like the imagery, it was beautiful and simple. Great job! and sorry for this kind of weird review XD

[Shalini Dinesh]

nice poem, i really enjoyed reading this, kind of different...

[Sar Jayne]

Beautiful.

[Water_the_Sun]

:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

:P I love you :D

Wonderful imagery, it flows well, and again infallible rhyming:)

[Jeff Loquist]

New Orleans now offers a modern-day spin on Absinthe...I have a feeling it refuses to elicit the same mental imagery as your poem does.

[Platus]

Well, it was inspired by the Absinthe Wikipedia page.