Founder

A wandering display

Devising a path of strength

Fear went into hiding

For closure would shy away

The aging years turned to youth

Once asked questions of wisdom

As you turn away from surrender

Revelations of the mind

The journeys that start

Those to end

As the idea of a yesterday

Ran into a silent village

Of dreams left on walls

Hands reaching for stars

Daring to stand in the face of dust

A ghost of fleeting moments

The memories of battles

Lost to be won

The concept of time

Would dance tonight

As pillars of history

Remained out of the shadow

Of all that was said

Hearts reviving light

Those starry eyes stood to stare

Gone is this idea of broken

As something came about

Unbroken

Reviews

[NMTArts]

Thanks for the read request. The writing definitely gives a historical or fantasy feel to it, almost like trying to recall a distant memory or remnant of a story. What is really interesting is that if you read only the first lines or read only the second lines the feel like stand alone poems.

My only criticism is that sometimes the phrasing in a sentence feels...odd? I would imagine the could be by intention.

Overall I enjoyed the poem.

[B]

To make you stop to think - it is
Thank you for your review

[barleygirl]

I admit that I'm not good at understanding nuanced writing . . . with that said, your message brings to mind how, in "old times" there were battles & we could point to some tangible lessons & discrete battles . . . but nowadays, "war" has become a never-ending all-encompassing way of living around the globe & even in our domestic lives. What have we learned? What can we learn by looking back? This is unlike any war that's ever been fought. I think the bad guys are getting better at war & the good guys are stuck in a historical loop which you've depicted in your poem! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[B]

waw you hit the nail
Thanks for your review !

[Paul Bell]

They always say history teaches us this.
The answers are in the past.
Now, you would think with all this information we would actually learn from it.
Yet strangely, we just repeat it.

[B]

Human nature is inevitable
Thanks paul

[Pete]

history is littered with the debris of what ifs and what happened. the passage of time shines a spotlight and puts things into perspective ... :)

"Those who cannot remember the past are condemned to repeat it. To covet truth is a very distinguished passion." - George Santayana

[B]

Love the quote
Thanks

[Robert Trakofler]

when I read ancient texts I often feel this way. That a culture that could produce such insight could crumble of it own might. But then I look at :modern" culture and see the same mistakes at play and in full display and wonder if furtherance will ever be obtained if art and life will ever be synonymous in the aspire or will the spires always fall top heavy from hope and wishes. Then I think that all we can do is just push and hope propel as much as we can. very nice set of lines you named yourself aptly in this write

[B]

Thank you bad bunny

[Chris Shaw]

I felt unresolved situations that remained broken history. But as we age and face the final curtain perhaps we see things with a different light. Maybe putting to bed past conflict. I may be well off the mark here, but that is the feeling your lines gave me. If my understanding is anywhere near correct, there has to be wisdom there.

Chris

[B]

You totally got it
And there is

[Chris Shaw]

Aw, so pleased I really understood you. There is so much wisdom in what you conveyed. :)

[Einstein Noodle]

from the ashes the Phoenix will rise eh!? my thoughts go so many directions in reading this .. even just considering the title and the pic ..seems to encompass a lot of history, and conflict of philosophies ... and for me .. your poem adds some mysticism .. closing in hope .. which i, an optimist, appreciate ;)
E.

[B]

Did you get what it is about ?

[Einstein Noodle]

no clarity of one theme ...read it several times and will again .. but like i said .. i am thrown in many directions at once ..most likely my noodle is a strudel ;)

[Einstein Noodle]

i think you are dealing with history .. and how time can affect the perception of it ... much human suffering is a product of our wars and solutions ... and in the end i History is well and truthfully written ..it stands .. but i am not sure :}

[B]

yes so true
you nailed it

[Einstein Noodle]

:) .....................