Under Attainment

Sometimes you just have to have high hopes !

Color of pale runs off retention

Blue birds baffle unknown branches

A key of witts in a world of freedom

For it's behind helium proximities

Attuned to a heart of many

Yet flees a singular beat

Predetermined past would  you deem me silent

As the chase of water slips away

Calling out lost forgotten names 

Differing tides stand in crowds

Attained in full closure gotten away

Closer to seem ivory far 

Taken down by arrangements to performance

Counting times of secured love

If by hoping they are but framed stories

Of all that is given

Never gone

Reviews

[J. K. Beach]

The trick is having high hopes and finding happiness in whatever our grasp manages to come down to earth with... doesn't really matter what we get as long as we're hoping and trying. There! That was my little mind trying to put your beautiful and beautifully enigmatic words in a box. I needn't have tried. They didn't need my stinking box. If ever there was an instance where a poem was not to "mean," but to "be," this is it. Just like we often get more when we try less... just a fine bit of word arranging my friend...

[B]

Thank you so much JK. Humbled by words

[CA Anurag Sharma]

Life is about the choices we make, but sometimes we barely are in control of thats happening around. Nice write up.

[B]

Thanks Anu.............

[John the Baptist]

The poet seems to use a stream of consciousness technique, staying open to the impressions that occur and recording them. There seems to be a theme of loss, maybe lost love, but not despair because of it. Perhaps there have been times of "secured love," and the memory of them keeps hope buoyant. The last two words may mean hope is never gone, or possibly the memory of past love is never gone. At any rate, the reader does not leave this work sad. Well done.

[B]

Thank you John
Its just a flashback i guess

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful photo and honest words. I tell people. We decide our journey, east or west, right or left. We direct our life. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry. Made the reader ponder your thoughts.
Coyote

[B]

Thanks C
Life is all about choices

[Coyote Poetry]

You are right and you are welcome.

[andrew mitchell]

Makes you wonder where the love goes, I suppose time plays it’s part.

[B]

Thanks Andrew for your review

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i wonder if we might ever find all those emotions that we have given up...perhaps they are stored somewhere.
insecurity is remembering all those times we thought we had secured love...but then found it gone.

[B]

Hey Jacob
Thanks for your review
You nailed it

How are you

[wordman]

the first stanza set the theme,pictures on the wall where love used to be,
reminiscing,wishing,wondering

[B]

Thanks wordman .... appreciate your review

[wordman]

you`re welcome

[Einstein Noodle]

very abstract ..i have to let go the "grasping" and read with free mind ;) the dichotomy in life abounds .. we try ..it doesn't work...we try not to try and under attain ... i think the water slipping away is the prominant thing i will carry away with me ... reminds me of Bruce Lee: https://youtu.be/APx2yFA0-B4
:) your closing leaves me pondering ..."Never gone" .... hmmmmmmmmmmm
E.

[B]

Hey E.
Thanks for your review..... i like what you see in my words