Only for the Softest of Hearts

To the shore the wave remains

The utlimate enemy of sand

Coming through with speeding hands

Pulling away the rigid lines

Unbelieving a nature too solid

It seeks a much needed fluidity

If for the bare eyes

More is to be observed of the scene

As timid waves thinking from the farthest distance

Riding the sea for months to years

Only to be overwhelmed with heart 

Emotions plead not guilty 

As the observing sun shines gentle rays

The shore stands the chance of another day 

Blueness rushes to it's aid reflecting a well known sky

Whispering to it's waters we are both but one

Sand disspates in the presenence of such love

Receding closer to a much held purpose

Until an innocent child piles a castle 

Closer to the waves' hunger 

fearless

She places hope upon the shoreline

Taking pictures of her heart

The much wiser sea now only knows 

To see thrashing waves coming through 

in lighter view

Forming foam like images playfully placid

As the sand embraces a much anticipated arrival

Until both form a world of blue 

Mingled with hints of white 

Never to forget a touch of gold

Through love and compassion

Expecting goodwill of it's certain presence

For a much distant wave rushes 

As children carry buckets of sand

Building hope out of laughter 

A view only for the softest of hearts

Welcoming the idea of better chances 

Leaving only one form of insanity

That of imagined ill will 

Reviews

[LylaCrystal]

This writing isn't only for the softest hearts. It can touch even the depths of the coldest soul.

~Lyla

[B]

Thank you so much lyla

[WillaDanvers]

This is beautiful. Both in that of how it has been crafted, and the language used to paint us a picture. Very talented!

[B]

Thank you Willa

[andrew mitchell]

This reminded me of many being innocent only to turn bad or become twisted, your last lines did that lol

[B]

Thank you Andrew

[Poetic License]

I am beyond words to describe my feelings upon reading this work. This spoke to every single fiber of my heart - both the softest part - and the most insane.

Your closing absolutely stole the show for me. With each line I read, I thought, "Man, that gets me. That is "the" line of this poem," only to read the next line and repeat the mantra. Your coup de gras at the end was simple perfection. Such wisdom and such unabashed honesty of the interpretation of a scene of innocence and beauty, that somehow, the wizened hearts will find a way to corrupt it with sorrow.

"As children carry buckets of sand
Building hope out of laughter

A view only for the softest of hearts
Welcoming the idea of better chances

Leaving only one form of insanity
That of imagined ill will"

I greatly enjoyed the form you chose for this poem, it looks and reads like a rolling sea. Waves coming in, coming in, coming in...and breaking, sliding forward just so and then washing out, washing out, washing out. Superbly crafted, whether intentional or not.

[B]

Thank you so much for such a gorgeous review

[Einstein Noodle]

wow! your turn in closing completely caught me ..what a blissful ride until then .. i say again wow! slam dunk to the chest my friend ..so enjoyed the oneness you paint .. the seeming conflict between wave and sand .. embracing one another endlessly .. the picture of children and sand castles giggling over their vain attempts to stand the breaches is charming to the max ... then you stab the scene with ill will ... sheeesh ! ;)
E.

[B]

Thank you so much E

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ................

[ForgottenByTheWorld]

So very beautiful. It's a beautiful scene and sentimental piece; even slightly philosophic. I love the language used which paints a beautiful picture in my head. I could smell the ocean and feel the sand as I read. Beautifully written and absolutely flawlessly executed.

[B]

thank you so much :)

[Stephen]

Beauty; Nicely done - no more to say

[B]

Thank you Stephen .... is that pronounced stephane .... like a french name ..... :P

[The Iron Horseman]

A lovely sentiment beautifully expressed.

[B]

Thank you so much

[The Iron Horseman]

You're welcome. Keep writing!

[mercy party]

i'm a big fan of strong last lines that leave me with something to ponder. i really liked how this closed and the philosophical virtue throughout.
I could feel the author drowning in the wake of someone else's freewill.
just my take on it. nice job!

[B]

I got too philosphical sometimes lol
Thank you MP .... sounds so british to say MP

[barleygirl]

The thing I like the most about your poem is the phrasing. Sometimes short stanzas can feel a little jaggedy, but in this case, everything flows perfectly & the short cadence is reminiscent of the actual waves of which you write. Many have written about the sea, but your expressions are original & vivid. I like the analogy of comparing the tug-of-war between waves & sand, to represent the way it can be in life, in society, & in relationships.

[B]

Thank you so much for understanding i am so happy