Monsieur Mitchell

A Poem by B

Twinkling

Giggle

Fills my Sunday

Glaring

Learning

Reasoning

Your words

Simply put

A chuckle

In all my cups of tea

The smile on a spree

© 2015 B

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Robert

You know nisreenaa, I really enjoy the format of your poems and the way you display them. Its original, I can't tell you how many times I have been told not to format my poems a certain way. Gets frustrating at times. Good job, niece piece.

Posted 9 Years Ago

9 Years Ago

I enjoy experimenting
I get shut down for trying new things
But that doesn't matterread more

Willard Wells

Nice bright happy piece. Just having a nice day and wanted to share.Thanks

Posted 9 Years Ago

9 Years Ago

Its basically how i feel every time i read Andrew poems

Nadia B.

Thank you for inviting me to read this lovely little poem so full of imagery. The title really sets the scene, I like how it is separate but at the same time a part of the poem's story. Your opening is incredibly strong with "Twinkling Giggle", unique, I love it. I am never for changing an original poem, but if I may inquire your thoughts about changing the word "Glaring" to fun, "Your words" to "Your candor", and "The smile on a spree" to "The smile sets me free," how would that read for you? Would it add or take away from the character you have built for Monsieur Mitchell? How would changing the words slightly change the setting and the flow? Please do not change this poem, but just for yourself, as a challenge (the toughest kind for a poet), see how your poem transforms as you alter here and there a word or two. I am hoping you will see the brilliance of your poem as it reflects one of those old picture books where the head, body, and feet of different people or creatures could be changed simply by flipping one page to make numerous possibilities. There is nothing simple about your poem or your style. Keep writing this way, it is absolutely fascinating, and then of course your Monsieur Mitchell is full of wit and charm!