Good luck Forgetting.

I'll strike you, not with power.

With my heart, it's grown so sharp...

 

I'll bleed you,

but it's not my fault.

It's your own impurity, I'm still a

snowflake.

 

You need. You want.

Two different things, find the similarity.

 

My mind, working. Pounding. Living in reality.

 

Don't tell me, hon.

Forget-me-not.

Reviews

[Slithering Angel]

This really quite wonderful in its power and simplicity. Great work. :-)

[Pi Cee]

Thanks!

[Bidu Ibrahim]

Its interesting the way you played with words! A powerful piece.

[J.M.B]

Enjoyed your piece. Love the snowflake analogy. Individuality.

[Kaylor Mason]

This is a good note on turbulent relationships and torn family. It's a picture of how harshly honest [a.k.a. brutal] real life can be.

[Xanthous Crow]

Need and want are similar, as you say, and often so close together that it is extremely difficult to tell which is which. What is need, exactly? What is want? Is there any definite answer? What one man wants another could need and vice versa!

I particularly enjoy: "I'll strike you, not with power/With my heart, it's grown so sharp...". The heart, in this case, is being referred to almost as a weapon. And, when I think about it, the heart actually is a very lethal weapon. The heart can destroy a person quite easily, as love can be damaged beyond repair or revoked, or, well, a person can simply shut their heart out to another.....

Brilliantly done. The tone of this poem is sharp, deep, personal. It certainly cuts deep into the reader.

[SoulCrusader (Yas)]

Packs a real cutting punch does this poem...
stunning write :D

[Jordan's Back]

This Has Striking Symbolism, and and interesting play on words. Your Heart, Cutting Deep, is also What is needed to Pierce the soul. Excellent write

[Coyote Poetry]

Some forgiveness is hard to get. Can take years or best to keep a distance.
"I'll bleed you,
but it's not my fault.
It's your own impurity, I'm still a
snowflake."
No weakness in this poem. I like the ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

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. powerfully expressive ...
. and i relate to your words ...
. my favourite line is ...

"My mind, working. Pounding. Living in reality."