It's Like-

A flower looking down for the first time
just as it's about to die.

Looking at stars and seeing them
right before you go blind.

Typing that letter for as long as it takes
to see the past and the tears and all the lost smiles
before you send it away without a reply.

We're suspended in this moment
being the life just before the
regret of a new beginning.

Reviews

[Trigorin]

Not bad. You have a good concept, but I think some of the language choice is a little bland. You could have used better imagery in places besides the three main metaphors, I think, but still, this is a good start.

[John]

If only I had enough time to describe the imagery formulated in my mind.
This is stunning, your work reminded me of long-lost memories and a cherished dream I once dreamt. The pen surely is mightier still.

[Joan Spahr, Soul Poetry]

To be able to look backwards before we reach the ultimate moment, brings to perspective, my message these days. You only have NOW. With this perspective, only the Now, regrets may become a thing of the past!

[quinfinn]

this defines sadness, regret and irony. so beautifully penned.

[Pi Cee]

Thank you quin.

[quinfinn]

as ever.....