You Try

you try and you fall
get up with skinned knees

you try and then you fall
and then get up with shaky knees

you tried before you fell
and then sunk down on your knees

Reviews

[Xanthous Crow]

Better to give up before you fail, I'd say. Although, one doesn't know that one is going to fail if one doesn't try. It's a pretty interesting (if not amusing) predicament. Nicely written.

[John]

A pretty bleak outlook. I like the repition and all.

[John]

*repitition

[Daniel Grant]

short yet very effective, i like the simplicity of this and how you have conveyed meaning in such a short space of words

[Steeven]

with so little lines you caught failure, what was attempted and, given up to before any further injury occurs.