My Heart's Desire

A poem just to get something off my chest using novice poetry. Enjoy~

All throughout my life I have longed for a lover,

but a lady worth my time and love proves hard to discover,

I want a girl who I can spoil and hold tight,

and make love to every single night,

I would give her my time, attention, and heart,

so long as she does not tear the latter apart,

and will always stand at my side through thick and thin,

being my only lover until my life comes to an end,

I care not about looks truth be honestly told,

for looks disappear as one grows to be old.

Intelligent or not, why would I ever give a care, 

for all I want is a love that can be sincerely shared!

I want a love to come home to from work every night,

one who honestly thinks I am her Mr. Right,

and grow old by my side, no care in the world,

for we will always have one another to hold.

Reviews

[Gregory Stires]

as i read this poem it brought such similar emotions to my heart since even though i am still young and in high school i desire to find a significant other but don't see any that makes my heart pump with love which is not very surprising since its a small school and a lot of the girls i do not like or their practically family to me. although i think the reason why i am so desperate to find love is because i hear my friends talking about their love life when i am the only one who doesn't have a significant other. i love the emotion you put in the poem itself and how it has a beautiful flow of words.

[Travis "Phoenix" Caldwell]

"although i think the reason why i am so desperate to find love is because i hear my friends talking about their love life when i am the only one who doesn't have a significant other."

[Bee C.]

This is a very well penned piece. I deeply enjoyed reading it, it has a beautiful flow to it. Very sweet, and while I may not agree with every word here, I understand and appreciate all of it which is important to achieve between writer and reader. But this is definitely well written from both technical and emotional standpoint. Top scores for this!

[Travis "Phoenix" Caldwell]

Thank you for the review

[Mz zaynab]

I love this... So real and exciting!

[Travis "Phoenix" Caldwell]

Thank you kindly~

[Mz zaynab]

I love this! Its real and exciting!

[PeterTrust]

Interesting. Mostly for someone looking for that one special "Lover".

[Angad Waraich]

Thats a very well done piece.
What better than the hunger and strife for that one person that'd light up our life.
Thank you for sharing i really enjoyed it.

Angad

[Travis "Phoenix" Caldwell]

Thanks for the review my friend!

[Angad Waraich]

You're most welcome.

[Adreamer's Bluejay]

Well, as opinionated as I am towards some of the lines in this write, it is an interesting write and I think there are enough people out there who understand and agree with what you've said to say it is relateable enough (one of the main skills each writer must develop in order to keep a hold of their audience.) But as I said earlier, it feels a little too exact for me to say I am one of those people. Anyway, back to your write itself, sorry about my rant; the rhymes are interesting and your use of syntax is executed well enough. Interestingly penned

[Travis "Phoenix" Caldwell]

Thanks for the review~

[MomzillaNC]

That love to walk Life's journey with us… it's what we all desire. I can attest, from own experience, that love is out there looking too. When we manage to break through all the noise and minutia of life to find each other, it really is a journey worth taking.