Rooms Full of Headaches

 

I have spent

the last

63 days

lying in bed

in the dark

Staring at

The ceiling

And the four walls around me

Because the moon

Has been casting

Shadows upon them

And all I can think about is how

Syd Barrett was a 

Schizophrenic

Dropping acid 24/7

And feeding it to his cats

God, he was a brilliant man

And God,

We are all brilliant people

But somehow

I still lay here

Paralyzed by the thought of

Getting out from under

These flannel bed sheets

And facing the world

It has been 

1512 hours since

My feet have touched the floor

And 1513 hours since my

Thoughts have been 

Coherent 

 

Author's Note

I wanted to write something raw; something messy. Lately, my thoughts have been all over the place and I think this describes my situation perfectly. I know it is not my best piece, but I can't help but smile for not wanting to edit it. Sometimes it is better to just leave it as it is.

Reviews

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

I'm a HUGE fan of Pink Floyd. Syd was weird, different, but Pink Floyd wouldn't have existed without him. I think every human being would go through this, question one self, one importance in this existing world. There's days where I look up at the ceiling and go through this fantasy land, day dreaming of becoming a published writer and meeting my favorite authors, and is that crazy? I sure hope not. Awesome write, girl.

[DezChampion]

I think you accomplished exactly what you set out to do, and not everyone can do that. I very much enjoyed this. It feels honest.

[Steve L.]

Love the flow of this piece...Raw and messy are better than trying to force something...

[Roger Turgeon]

I see the spiral growing wider

[Gedalya]

AUTOMATISM at its finest. . .

[Mittens]

Actually I don't think there's any editing you could do here; when I read through it, I thought the appearance of this piece was done intentionally to create the atmosphere that you intended. The nature of your writing inherently lends itself to the feelings that you're trying to portray, so I think you struck gold with this the way it is. :)

I really like the tone and mood that you set; it's very immersive for the reader, allowing us to experience the story through your eyes. Very well done! :)

[FlatLineBeauty]

Very raw with lots of messy imagination. I liked this one. It was very intriguing to me. xo Winter.

[Inda]

Very raw indeed, great write! Your narratives are always spectacular, I imagine a short story coming from this, it is that poweful even though it is short.

[Stanley King]

A wonderful piece that describe's how many thought's can run through one's mind in a single minute! Wonderful!!

[costa siwale]

This is a subliminal poem, I love it, has a sort of uncertainty and mystery. Well done Phoen-ix