I absolutely love this. I can definitely relate to this poem. Questioning yourself about all the ways that you could have hurt the relationship...but in the end it could be as simple as the other person's toxicity. Excellent job.
This sounds as if it's about a relationship having trouble, with one of the affected parties trying to justify upon whom the fault should be placed. Unfortunately, when most relationships end one can wonder forever just what went wrong, what could have (and should have) been done differently. Your poem gives voice to that dilemma very nicely. take care...dan
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Yes it is about that. All relationships have their own take of the blame game hey.
Thank you .. read moreYes it is about that. All relationships have their own take of the blame game hey.
Thank you so much for reviewing :)
It's true it's all my fault...
Sorry too soon :)
I love how well this depicts what basically bad relationships lead to the blame game,
Beautiful work Aphy,
With Love,
Shadowkai
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
:) Yeah hey, and it always happens to every relationship. Thanks for reading
thanks for sending the reading request, I like the repetition in the poem and the way u can make it rhyme. I also love how poems like this are able to relate by heartbreak and the statement used to question "maybe" is excellent. :) Keep writing and sending me requests.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you for reviewing and I'm glad you enjoyed and could relate to it.
Thank you for the review you sent. I appreciate it very much.
Irony always has its place in life, and your poem definitely applies to the current thoughts I am having about a loved one. You covered the doubtful mind we get very well. I look forward to reading more.
Have a great day,
Thank you so much Dann for reading my poem and yes, this will not be the last of me. Thanks again fo.. read moreThank you so much Dann for reading my poem and yes, this will not be the last of me. Thanks again for reading and reviewing my work.
9 Years Ago
My thanks to you, and to all the writers on this site. I wished I had found this site sooner. It's l.. read moreMy thanks to you, and to all the writers on this site. I wished I had found this site sooner. It's like finding a home for our talent. :-)
9 Years Ago
I know right. We're all like one big family. Supportive and motivating. It's what I like most about .. read moreI know right. We're all like one big family. Supportive and motivating. It's what I like most about being here. That I didn't feel new...I just fit it perfectly
This is a very sad and yet very true poem. SO many relationships go through this and bring one another down at times and tell each other or make each other feel like it is their fault etc...I loved this
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thanx for the review and the touching words Angelique. Glad you enjoyed it
I like how you have shown the process of trying to justify a broken relationship without placing the blame on the one who did the hurting. I love that this piece is short and sweet and to the point.
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you Jo for the very nice words. Glad you enjoyed reading it
this is a very short but very true poem. it is hard when things like this happen but it takes real people to make this tragic event into such a beautiful poem. with that being said i adore this poem. its short sweet and sad and makes the point very clear. this is a emotional piece in few words but its the things left unsaid that make it work
Posted 9 Years Ago
9 Years Ago
Thank you so much Breanna and I'm glad you enjoyed reading this.
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