Chapter Three

Syrese finds out a little about herself and how magic in this land works.

   My legs screamed with exhaustion. We had been walking for most of the day without any breaks. I kept trying to get one of them to tell me what our destination was, but Arthur was a master of avoiding questions, and Keiju always simply smiled and said "Secret."

I trailed behind Arthur, who was clearly having trouble because of his old age, while Keiju was far ahead. Gracefully jumping around, obviously a trait inherited from his Vek parent.

 

   "How much further?" I whined.

"Not long, we're almost to our stopping point." Arthur replied, his strained voice making him seem even older.

"But you said that at noon!" I protested.

He laughed. "Patience, my dear Syrese. It is what every great man, and woman, needs."

I sighed and pressed on in silence, then I came to the top of a hill to see the peak was flat, and Keiju was sitting at it's center, waiting. The hill was shaded from the trees that surrounded it, with the center brightly light, and nearby a creek could be heard. Although, it was empty, unnaturally empty, of life, and sound. The grass that covered it had no patches, as if no part was ever dry or lacked nutrients. It seemed as if it were flawless, perfect.  

 

   "Now could you tell me where we are?" I asked, relieved.

Keiju smiled "We are in the deaf part of the forest, where no outside force could ever listen in on us, many call it Sorcerer's Plateau, but I call it Secret."

I looked around and saw that all the trees seemed to stop growing up the hill at a certain point, leaving only grass to grow. I looked back towards Keiju and saw Arthur sitting next to him, stroking his white stubble that had grown on his face. He gestured me to sit down, then started explaining.

"A long time ago, when sorcerers were able to roam and practice freely. They wanted a place where no man, animal, Vek, or tree could hear them. A handful of sorcerers gathered here and produced a force field large enough to cover this hill, and strong enough to last for generations. The reason I have brought you here is because Talroid could be listening no matter where we are in this forest."

 

   The name Talroid rung in my head as the dream came back to me. My heart ached as I saw the man, who was supposedly my father, was brought to his knees by an unseen force. Arthur's voice then cut into my recollection of the dream.

"Syrese, I know you have only known me for a short time, and I don't expect you to trust me or believe everything I tell you, but I must say. I am not tricking nor deceiving you. There is something you must know and it is the reason I have brought you here."

I stared, both interested and confused with everything he was saying. "Syrese, you are the second child of Alson Creen, a member of the most powerful sorcerer family known."

 

   I leaned back, looking for a spec of foolery in his face. None. If he was lying, he was hiding it well.

"You surely must be joking. I haven't an ounce of magic in me, I swear it!" Fear filled my voice. Even in Tenra Sorcerers were considered outcasts, for many feared there power, but we were now in Talroid. Where if someone was found a sorcerer they were executed...or worse.

 

   I stood, wanting to run away, but my legs would not permit it. Keiju moved behind me quickly and silently, putting his hands on my shoulders. This is it. I thought. They will either kill me here or turn me in claiming I am something that I'm not! Keiju dug for something in his pack, then put a small bottle to my face. I sniffed it, expecting it to be poison, but to my surprise the smell was calming.

Keiju whispered to me softly. "Calm Syrese, I am not going to harm you. I wish only to be your friend, so please sit down and let us explain further."

He withdrew the bottle and gestured me to take a seat across from Arthur, I obeyed and looked at him, somewhat fearful.

 

   Arthur caught my attention by pulling out a fairly large book. "I understand your fear, and given what kingdom we are in, it must be even worse for you, but if you had been left where you were, you would have surely been discovered and it may have not been a good turnout."

I nodded, knowing he was right, and looked to the book he had pulled out. He noticed my curiosity and spoke. "If leave it be much longer your magic will die, so I have searched long and hard to find one of the 'unforgotten books', which is what you see before you."

I moved so I could see the book better, it was leather bound with beautiful engravings of purple that swirled along the book, hugging each inch of the book. On the corners were leaves connected to their branch, made from black iron, an extremely strong metal that could not easily be forged. I reached over to the book, drawn by some unseen force, Arthur placed the book in my lap, and I slowly opened it. On the first page read the words: The human eyes are the path to both a man's fears and a man's desires. I looked up, and Arthur signaled me to continue reading.

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   The ones with the eyes of grey, they have the gift of The Great Karten, that, we of the land call, Magic. Magic is forever changing, forever developing, infinite knowledge. For this, many fear those who wield it. In this land, magic has split into two. Witches, those who work with material magic and tend to heal living things, and Sorcerers, the select few who have an unimaginable amount of internal magic or säteily. Sorcerers deal with magic called Taikoa, it is the magic within everything and everyone. Sorcerers can manipulate that magic at will and form it or move it at will, but while Taikoa has never ending classes, it takes one entire human life time to perfect the magic. This rule applies to every class, to the most basic to the most elaborate, and to every sorcerer, no matter their natural skill level.

 

   Every person cannot be a witch let alone a sorcerer. Witches, while not as strong as sorcerers, have a good deal of magic in them. However, witches differ greatly in their säteily strength. Unlike witches, sorcerers have a small range of säteily strength, but the small differences are extremely noticeable; one common feature in all sorcerers, is grey eyes. Although, while all sorcerers have grey eyes, not all grey eyed people are sorcerers, a group of people have mutated to have grey eyes with no magical ability. There is another common rule within the sorcerers that is, the darker the grey eyes, the more powerful the säteily inside the person is. This rule has only one exception, The Pyhä, a rare person of pure sorcerer blood, with snow white hair and tinted purple eyes. They are extremely powerful even by sorcerer standards, but they are difficult to control and can easily become corrupt.

 

  Just as everything in this world there is a good, and an evil. There is much debate as to what is considered Good Taikoa, but none as to what is Evil Taikoa. This group of Paha Taikoa is known as 'Unspoken'. Named for the ability to control without movement of the body. It is purely on the wielder's mental ability, nothing more. The names of some of these Taikoas are Mind, Tumma life, and Nukke. Mind Taikoa has the ability to not only read one's thought, but also take over one's will. Although, if the person is able to gather enough strength properly this can become harmful to the wielder. Tumma life Taikoa is the Taikoa that is able kill the plant life around it, and form it into a darker version of the life that was killed, for example: a wielder is able to make simple ivy wither and bring forth a thorned ivy with potent poison. Nukke Taikoa is the magic of puppets, they can make any non-living object come to life and make it move as if it had a beating heart. Many of these Taikoa's could be used for good, but even when they were created, the only use has been paha, or evil.

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   I looked up from the book to see the stars in the sky, and a small tent. I stood and saw Arthur fast asleep in it, and Keiju seemed to be no where in sight. How long had I been reading? I wondered. Although 'reading' wasn't the right word. I had never learned to read, with this book it felt as if I was...listening. 

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[Kuro]

" My legs screamed with exastuion. We had been walking for most of the day without any breaks, I kept trying to get one of them to tell me what our destionation was but Arthur was a master of avoiding questions, and Keiju always simply smiled and said 'Secret.'" exhaustion* destination* And its a really long sentence xP try to end it after "breaks"

" It is was ever" lol is or was?

"Although it was empty,unnaturally empty of life, and sound." not a complete sentence xS

"sound. the grass" The*

"I asked(,) relieved."

"both intersted and" interested*

" sorcer" sorcerer*

"looking for a speak of foolery in his face." spec?

"Even in Tenra Sorceres were considered outcasts, for many feared there power, but we were now in Talroid, where if someone was found a sorcer they were executed...or worse." sorcerer*
Try to make this one into two sentences as well.

"Arthur, i obeyed" I*

"where you did, you" 'where you were' seems to fit better here

"out. he noticd my" He noticed*

"curousity" curiosity*

"If left much longer your magic will die, so I have searched hard to and find one of the 'unforgotten books', which is what you see before you." Great job remembering the single quotes. However "hard to and find" try to rephrase that portion.

"On the corners were leaves connected to there branch, made from black iron, an extremely strong metal that could not easily be forged." their? o.0

" into two, Witches" end the sentence after "two"

"(to the most basic to the most elaborate)" used commas instead of parentheses here put something like ", from the most basic to the most elaborate, to every sorcer(er), no matter their natural skill level."

" While every person can be a witch let alone a sorcer. " the way this is written it makes me think there should be a "not" in there somewhere.

"them, but witches differ greatly in their säteily strength. " new sentence after them and use "However" or something other then "but" to start it.

" Unlike witches, however, sorcere(r)s" try to use 'however' at the beginning of sentences only, if you can.

"in all sorcere(r)s although is grey eyes." you don't need the 'although'

"Although while all sorcere(r)s have grey eyes, not all grey eyed people are sorcere(r)s," Use something to the effect of "On the other hand while all sorcerers..."

"Tumma life Taikoa is the Taikoa that can kill the life around it and form it into a darker version," try to phrase that simpler if you can. Its hard to understand as is. (to me anyway)

" tant." tent*

Lovely! Sorry for the delay, had school today and some lengthy homework. Over all I loved it ^0^ Though some parts were a bit confusing I still understood the basic idea. Also do you have Microsoft word? If so I highly recommend using it. It will help a lot with the spelling and typo mistakes. However if you don't have it then try to use Google. Type in a word you are unsure of how to spell. I used Google a few times while going through this just to let you know -.^ Oh and one more thing! A neat little trick my 3rd grade teacher taught me with commas. If you can say the sentence without the section that is "comma'd" off then you have it right. Here is an example:

When I tried to turn on the light, after regaining my balance, the bulb burnt out.

Whether or not you have that small section in there the sentence still makes complete sense.
Looking forward to Chapter 4! Keep up the great work =D

[Philppa]

:D thank you for always taking the time to edit my work x3 I've really learned a lot and i'm glad people are not able to read it easier without getting irrated with ll the typos and missing parts.
I have just finished Chapter 4 and i'm putting it in at the moment. I would have it already up but I had to change a big thing so it took more time than I would have guessed. ^.^ I'm glad you love my story so much and you're really getting me motivated to write faster.

[Kuro]

Don't write too fast xP Oh also I tend to read really fast... my mind likes to jump to conclusions which is probably why the small mistakes don't bug me much... however I miss them the first time around too xD.

[Philppa]

well this is a story i've already been writing and I had already almost finished chapter 4. (and now chapter 5 because of the edit)

[Kuro]

Ah ok. The two I'm writing I post on here. Everything I have written on both of my stories is posted xD... Other then My character "cheat sheet" as I like to call it

[Philppa]

Well my story is going to be written all over. I have my first written version (which is what I write my story in first) then I have this, so I can get feedback from people, then I'm going to write it on my new computer (once I get one)and edit...and edit..and edit soe more. then possibly get it published :D (It' all in the dream.)

[Kuro]

haha xD Well I wish you luck then C= I don't think mine will ever get published unless I self publish... Which I am too lazy to do

[Philppa]

You never know till you try :)