His Altered Mirror

Dedicated to Eve ...

His Altered Mirror

Put into blissful sleep

The Man of Clay

Lay upon the fertile soil

Of Eden’s sacred garden

 

From within his being

A piece of bone removed

Transformed into the echo

Of humanity’s beginning

 

From this point on

Through sanctified grace

Transferred the responsibility

Of every resonance mirror

 

To produce more Men of Clay!

 

Phillozofee @ 2009

Reviews

[Valentine]

Wonderful..for a while I thought when you wrote about the bone and the echo..that us females did not know when to keep quiet// Kathie

[Legion]

I like this. A good progression again and again. Kudos.

[Gandré]

I don't like this biblic Creation idea (in general I don't like it, this Biblic Creation Idea, I mean) for it is written from the point of view of the alpha male but I see your playfulness so where did he come from, laying upon the fertil soil, not from the body of a woman? Perhaps we should understand religions in symbols as the world used to be, I can see this clearly, the indigenous man thought in symbols when he saw a woman he didn't see sex; he saw his future sons. Philoponus suggests at one point that the movement of the heavens could be explained by a 'motive force' impressed on the celestial bodies by God at the time of creation - when this is not shamanistic...I like that. Exactly what you said: he has seen Eve as productive birth machine of his future sons "men of Clay."
Thanks for leaving me a positive review on my recent poem. I missed you, too.