Amour Enchanté

In Dodoitsu genre ... forbidden fruit

Amour Enchante'

Her secret incantations

Evoked his darker spirit

It took all his inner strenght

To stop temptation

 

Phillozofee @ 2008

Reviews

[Helen Woodward]

There is a definitive Biblical feeling here of disobedience/temptation...one and the same? I wonder...
What I love about this is that my amazement at story telling done in so few words is awakened and you are so good at this. My friend writes Haiku/Senryu and is trying to teach me, but I'm Mickey the dud when it comes to this genre, more a 'chatty gal' Your message is clear Phill, that is the ultimate goal.
Kudos, enchanting indeed...
Helen :-)

[xlynne]

i like how deep this poem feels. you describe a lot in just four short lines. the poem had this desire, love, and rich feel to it. and your picture only enhances my feelings of it. its a great poem, and the title is superb. french is like velvet to me, so its only even more, further enhances my opinions of this poem.

[Gandré]

this is how temptation happens. When forbidden love happens then both missed something and they are going for it to make them completed. Once he might refuse her but what about the next time? Earlier or later he will take what he is missing? This was beautiful composition.

[Blade & Blood (The ..]

Reminds me of the story of Adam and Lilith. Great work! It's actually quite descriptive and I love that detail about it. Thanks for posting this one. I love it!

Ironically Yours, Blade and Blood