Fool Am I ...

For a contest

Fool am I ...

Glancing over my shoulder

I caught her staring out the windowpane,

It stopped me in my tracks

My soul spellbound once again,

From cascades of silken amber tresses

Dancing down a porcelain fair face,

To frame those pastel eyes of powdery green.

 

And pressed up closer to the glass

I noticed parted trembling lips of rosy pink

Mouth undecipherable words towards my heart

For it was not rain running down her cheeks

But teardrops I had caused for being rash

Fool am I to cause such needless thoughtless pain

So running to her arms, I fled again!

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

( Look darling, its Phil Oz O'fee, the craftiest poet there since Pablo Neruda they say. What do you think darling? Should I hate him? ..."You don't even know him."...I know, that's true, but there's just something about him, something around the lines; reminds me of...ME! No...I'm sure of it, I hate him. ) lol lol great job on this, just feeling like Holiday today. :o)

[Carole]

Phill, I didn't know you could write romance?! Very well done. The imagery is equisite throughout. This has a different flavor for you, and it is quite enthralling. Thanks for sharing from your heart. :-) Carole

[Kasey Klein]

An interesting poem.

Straightforward.

[Kelly D. Burris]

What a bittersweet piece. I loved how you felt conviction and compassion for her to stir you to movement.
Beautiful piece of tenderness.
Kelly

[Valentine]

A very nice write and the ending with him waking up to what he had done adn then going back to right it was a novel ending..God bless and good luck on the contest..Valentine

[Nely Amorim]

an interesting concept, subtle translation, this one, like most good poetry requires reading more than once and each read, provides a new insight. i liked it, it is very descriptive yet elusive... well done

[Nicole (Carpe Diem)]

this is a fantastic piece - great write

[DrumMajorPod]

I love the words that you used.. they make the whole scene so clear. The poem has a sad feel to it.. but the ending was kinda happy, I think. I adore this poem. The title fits it so well (as it does match a line, but it also matches the sentiments behind the poem). Great work.. I am impressed. =]

[RHEA CROSLEY]

It is a beautiful picture and the worlds go well with it. I like your writing I hope you add some more.