Fool Am I ...

For a contest

Fool am I ...

Glancing over my shoulder

I caught her staring out the windowpane,

It stopped me in my tracks

My soul spellbound once again,

From cascades of silken amber tresses

Dancing down a porcelain fair face,

To frame those pastel eyes of powdery green.

 

And pressed up closer to the glass

I noticed parted trembling lips of rosy pink

Mouth undecipherable words towards my heart

For it was not rain running down her cheeks

But teardrops I had caused for being rash

Fool am I to cause such needless thoughtless pain

So running to her arms, I fled again!

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

( Look darling, its Phil Oz O'fee, the craftiest poet there since Pablo Neruda they say. What do you think darling? Should I hate him? ..."You don't even know him."...I know, that's true, but there's just something about him, something around the lines; reminds me of...ME! No...I'm sure of it, I hate him. ) lol lol great job on this, just feeling like Holiday today. :o)

[Kena Dawn Augustine]

Very descriptive, i could actually see the beautiful woman in sadness. i think it's nice you did recognize you were a fool, and come to try it one more time (let's hope she lets you)lol you take a simple idea and turn it into such a wonderous work that shines on the page!!

[pal]

A lovely poem expressing sentiments of love.

pal

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

This is quite stunning - I know these feelings well. You have painted a vivid picture with your words. Best of luck in the contest. Truly delightful read.
Light,
Siddartha

[Lorraine Pearson]

Very vivid write. Nice piece Phil.
~Lorraiyne

[The Random Writings Of ..]

I love the way this is written in the third person and such a beautiful piece. You have a way with words that so many of us lack..... at least I do. You can take a short piece and turn it into something beautiful. Outstanding!
xoxo

[Andromeda]

beautiful narrative poem

[Sandra K]

What a pretty poem. The picture that your words have choosen, is so beautiful.
Thanks for sharing, this wonderful work of art with me!

Sandra K!

[Brenda Sue]

Very beautifully written. The story is so clear. Great job.

[Jennifer Ryan]

Very good! We say things we don't mean but when we realize the portent our words have extracted we try to back track.

[shadadakiya]

wow that was great very beautifully written