Fool Am I ...

For a contest

Fool am I ...

Glancing over my shoulder

I caught her staring out the windowpane,

It stopped me in my tracks

My soul spellbound once again,

From cascades of silken amber tresses

Dancing down a porcelain fair face,

To frame those pastel eyes of powdery green.

 

And pressed up closer to the glass

I noticed parted trembling lips of rosy pink

Mouth undecipherable words towards my heart

For it was not rain running down her cheeks

But teardrops I had caused for being rash

Fool am I to cause such needless thoughtless pain

So running to her arms, I fled again!

Reviews

[Fabian G. Franklin]

( Look darling, its Phil Oz O'fee, the craftiest poet there since Pablo Neruda they say. What do you think darling? Should I hate him? ..."You don't even know him."...I know, that's true, but there's just something about him, something around the lines; reminds me of...ME! No...I'm sure of it, I hate him. ) lol lol great job on this, just feeling like Holiday today. :o)

[Audrie]

Ahhh - it sounds like you are a fool whom redeemed himself. Short, sweet and informable - I think that many people don't realize how painful words can be - it sounds like you do. you're no fool - at least this poem portrays you as a wise lover and learning subject of the many complications that accompany love.

[Carrie Montgomery]

very well done my friend!

[Kathleen Marie]

Aw.... I can so relate. Did you win? I hope so... Very well penned.

[Bonnie]

This poem flows well. The imagery and feelings are rich.

I like the lines about it not being rain but tears.

Worthy of the contest.

[J. Hampton]

Fear of facing ...the pain we caused....face to face
to run is easier...
we have all done it in one way or another

simple ...clear visual setting ,....nice work

Blessssssssssssss

[Zane Mathias]

Wow deep! this is a great write full of emotion and a stuggel that this person seems to keep repeating. fleeing is not had to do but stay and facing it is harder than most people know. keep up the Great writes B.P.

[Kal]

nice...
good! :)

[Greg the Bard]

Never having been in the situation I wonder why anyone would cause such pain. The poem flows a little ruff at times. But the image is wonderful. I can feel the rain that is realy tears. Good work

[Norma J. Jessee]

Sorry I'm late, You have probably already won the contest.

You have captured the moment. You created a vivid picture with your words.
Harsh words spoken in haste always sting the soul, even when we know they were'nt really meant.
You always give us great points to ponder.

[Poetic Injustice]

Bravo.