Lost Property

Happens ………..

Lost Property

You once held the key

To everything within me

Then cruelly broke the lock

Copyright @ Phillozofee 2018

Reviews

[Jisun]

dunno if you did this on purpose, but I like how the first two lines end with the 'ee' sound which is very free, very smooth, then the last one ends with the 'k' sound which is very harsh and sudden, and it's almost like a deathly stop of the heart if you can imagine it that way. the 'k' sound also sets the whole contradictory nature of the line to me. also, I really love the 'k' sound. :)
the picture is sad but I think it represents what the poem is about quite well.

this isn't a haiku...is it an almost haiku? was that your intention?

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Spot on my friend … you nailed the theme! And you are right no Haiku but Senryū - which tends to be about human foibles, whilst haiku tends to be about nature. :-)

[Abraham Kureshi]

These 3 lines have a lot of meaning in it.
Well done, nice write! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

perfectly stated, yes.
after awhile...we just can't fix the lock anymore...or part of the old key gets stuck in it...and the lock is useless just like our heart.

[¿]

I must say the image is speaking almost half of the poem....also in three lines it speaks like hundreds of meaning bottled in...
Great read😊

[Ardra]

Mmm ah. ... I just feel like in mood for this kind of poem... lost key ..lost heart...and finally a lost soul..... you sure match my moods with your poetry... :)