Rejection
A Poem by Phill Oz O'fee
 Speaks for itself ............ 
Rejection
Reciprocation Not
part of the agenda
Smashed my fragile heart
Phillozofee @ 2017
© 2017 Phill Oz O'fee
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I like the way you approach this from a "negation" point of view (it's NOT this) . . . my only suggestion is that the last line could be pumped up ("left" is a verb that conveys nothing & "broken heart" is cliché). Just an idea: "my busted heart bleeds" (making it more personal & graphic maybe). Just an idea . . . (((HUGS)))
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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7 Years Ago
Yes .. I see what you mean ... so ... hope you approve of the amendment! :-)
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7 Years Ago
Ah yes! Love it! Much more dynamic & intensely stated! Great fix! (((HUGS)))
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7 Years Ago
Thank you - hugs right back at you!!!!!!!!
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Rejection hurts the most...
Very well written..I loved it.
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
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I like the way you approach this from a "negation" point of view (it's NOT this) . . . my only suggestion is that the last line could be pumped up ("left" is a verb that conveys nothing & "broken heart" is cliché). Just an idea: "my busted heart bleeds" (making it more personal & graphic maybe). Just an idea . . . (((HUGS)))
Posted 7 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
This comment has been deleted by the poster.
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7 Years Ago
Yes .. I see what you mean ... so ... hope you approve of the amendment! :-)
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7 Years Ago
Ah yes! Love it! Much more dynamic & intensely stated! Great fix! (((HUGS)))
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7 Years Ago
Thank you - hugs right back at you!!!!!!!!
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Added on August 7, 2017
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Phill Oz O'feeWinchester, Hampshire, England, United Kingdom
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I am caught in a time spiral of confusion; that period we all experience between birth and death.
Somewhere inside hides a poet, writer, lyricist and/or whatever, laying dormant and suppressed by s.. more..
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