When Darkness Spoke

A poem about the all consuming darkness.

When Darkness Spoke

It gave birth to a beast

The whole earth it shook

All life it took

And on all joy it did feast

All human will it broke

The world was ravaged by its fearsome claws

All nations it did destroy

Great brutality did it employ

And all human glory was crushed in its jaws

When Darkness Spoke

The world into shadow fell

Everyone was blind and stumbling

For a glimpse of light they were fumbling

And all felt they were in hell

Anything bright the shadow did choke

There was nothing they could follow

All certainty was taken

All bravery was shaken

And indeed humanity felt quite hollow

When Darkness Spoke

It whispered into humanity's ear

It told them things seemingly sweet

Things which would be humanity's defeat

And of consequences humans had no fear

Humanity felt free of any yoke

They acted in such vile ways

The world being theirs for consumption

Falling ever deeper into corruption

They unwary of the price they must pay

All this came to pass

When Darkness Spoke

Reviews

[Jordan]

Not bad. It seemed that some parts just drug out the same idea, but it wasn't awful. I think it could use a little refining in that you should streamline the delivery of the idea.

6/8

[Aventicus]

Yeah, I can see that. Ill take another look at it and see what I can do.