cold river

Cold River

nearby the wild geese
click their solitary beat
by the wind ice trees

Reviews

[there is no more from m..]

what a grate poem :)

[raining]

the three elements of this poem, the geese, the solitary beat, the ice trees combine to give that flash of a single metaphor above in the sky. I like this kind of poem alot

[celyn]

This is refreshing..

[Sasavet]

I'm jealous of your haiku abilities. It can be so limiting sometimes, but you really paint a subtle, but vivid picture. Winter is very mysterious, and the "solitary geese" add a bleak tone, and you reach that mood with hardly any words. That's what writing is about.

Love this.

[Emily B]

love the geese . . . they are so free

[Fabian G. Franklin]

A very nice haiku/senryu piece. It's wind and ice here now...sleeting madly!

[Tracie Skarbo]

brrrr this one leaves me with a chilly feeling. :) Great job

[Ed Hart]

you think there's room for both of us on this mountain?

[deeps]

This is wonderful
like this muchly