Tony and Elvis

Tony & Elvis

Tony has his music on,
a whole lotta shakin'
as he sits
sipping coffee on his steps
so many times, daylight distends
an arm of sky on this terrain
of early morning open flowers
and always Tony sitting there
an older man, an enigma,
a steady listener Elvis fan
he cups his coffee with both hands
and if I ask him for the time
he likes to watch the morning sky
and says it's going on to five
and there we sit, silence compressed,
me, with my elbows on my knees
we watch the cardinals as they sing
he once had many wives he claims
as he shakes journeys from his sleeve
and as he leaves to paint a house
he found in town when he was out
he ponders on some
blue suede shoes & sings to
final curtain too
then finds his keys & starts his truck
and says he thinks that's everything
he stashes wine
behind his seat
and rumbles off down lonely street.

Reviews

[Doctor Deathstab]

I pretty much have to agree with everyone else. Adding anything else would be redundant.

[raining]

story-like responce to a true man. the color is so good and the end of the poem creates a real impression of the man. you can tell by the sincerity that it was taken not a snap shot but a cam-corder shot. the intensity is from within the narrative and not outright spoken. this i like. i am a friend of miss burns.

[Neg]

Great work!!! simply put amazing!!!!

[Ken Simm.]

The perfect desription of a flawed man in an equally flawed moment. A superb observational write from one of the few real writers on here.

[Greg the Bard]

In a serpentine choris of images the one true thought is that this man has lived his life to the full and is trying to share it. I found to many lines of poignant views that I hate to extract one over another to mark as the best. "Tony sitting there an older man,". With each day that passes we all are a little older for the experince. No two days are ever alike. I like this alot but found it better read after the third time of reading. I believe this is one of your deeper works demanding more from the reader. That being said, it is for the good of the reader for it makes him think more inward than just on the surface of the write. Well done.

[Olivia Carmine]

Awesome! I really liked it :) I am so feeling the beat lol...

[Legion]

"shakes journeys from his sleeves" - that line was priceless. The whole piece is nostalgic and well done. Kudos.