At Play

At Play

Sometimes I am a grenade girl,
so passionate, but malingering,
ticking off seconds to myself.
Or I am a cherry bomb.
A smoke screen of deliberate
intensity and watchfulness.
Like the cherry on this drink.
I don't drink this early.
I really don't drink at all,
but I am swayed that you placed
a cherry on top.
I like that you added a little extra.
Something pretty and sweet,
to hide the burn.

Author's Note

Reviews

[deeps]

I like this alot.
I really enjoyed the part of
"I don't drink this early" that is cute.
Very well written and creative.

[Sel Whiteley]

The beautiful images you set up: yourself, a bomb, full of intensity, with time fusing down to nothing. This is sophisticated, the cherry on top, what a great image. Then that heart-rendering end: 'to hide the burn.'
Powerful!

[Emily B]

oh, oh, oh, I didn't see it going there. I like how you layered it. It worked so well. oh, wow

[My Name is Brenda and I..]

I love poems that are tight and packed with images like this one. Poems that have story. Especially like the image of clicking off the seconds to yourself. Have a lovely day. Brenda