Knocking down Shards

 

 

 

Knocking Down Shards

 

Where the ceiling fell

there are still pieces wedged

in an aesthetic of poverty

I see the raggedy edge

of a total collapse

I pull down pieces of cork board

that crumble in my hand

I finger loose the rough glue

and try to picture something new

I cannot remember the ceiling

exactly as it was

but I do remember it

as a fine thing.

It is a tiring job & the store

no longer carries

that size and shade of cork.

I sit in a straight back chair

and stare intently

at the vacancy and the revelation

of dark emptiness

I see the hidden beams

and the newly made web

of a brown spider

It is busier than I am,

knowing exactly

from natural experience,

how to recreate a world.

I should continue now

knocking down shards

clearing some small space

for the new

I should make some sort

of restoration,

replace the whole ceiling

with a strong wood

But I am too intent

on watching the brown spider,

neatly propelling

through the shimmer of silk,

her tiny legs perfect

for dancing.

 

 

 

Reviews

[Spoken]

oh i love the imagery flowing through your words here. the ceiling shattered and crumbling an excellent metaphor for someones life crashing down and the added spider effect was simply.. wonderful!

But I am too intent on watching
the brown spider,neatly propelling
through the shimmer of silk,
her tiny legs perfect
for dancing.

my fav lines.

[HoorayForUnderdog]

favorite line:
"It is busier than I am,knowing exactly from natural experience,how to recreate a world"
I love your style!

[Emily B]

I am reminded of Edna St. Vincent Millay

Safe upon the solid rock
the ugly houses stand
Come and see my shining palace
built upon the sand.

Cork or wood or silk are all brilliant choices for new construction. Each has its own shining qualities.

[Tomás Ó C..]

Wow, renovating can often bring such thoughts, captured excellently here...

[Larissa G.]

I love the entire piece, flow images and all. Especially love the hidden message, where you watch the busier spider. Insects and arachnids work harder than some humans these days; although sometimes it's because we are too entranced and even uninspired rather than downright lazy.
Thanks for sharing. :)

[W.k.kortas]

The whole idea of reconstruction, of beginning anew, cf. the desire to retain what was is handled wonderfully, skilfully. Wonderfully visual, marvelously paced. Fine, fine writing.