Remarks On Something Beautiful

you find a word and drop the vowel
an o couplet comes rolling out
O' eloquence, O' Elixir
no need to hide beneath the chair
demure the molecules of sound

there was a comely harbinger
incipient, with a fairy's hair
arrived, a gossamer so fine
I took her thoughts & made them mine

this is for you, my lovely girl
who had such passion for the world
halcyon darling, sweetest heart -
a manuscript for what was not
available, here in this place

A musical lilt & morning breaks
mellifluous, an angel's gait
offing lips that knew the sea
the summery touch of secret wish
something beautiful and yet
scintilla longings chewed my lips
who could protect such innocence

Reviews

[Marie Anzalone]

Phibby, your use of images and vocabulary and thought fragments to tell a story, is second to none; here, your words to me fall into place like a masterpiece in watercolor... a splash of light here, some shadow there, some rain here, sunlight there. And the picture that forms before my eyes is [perhaps wrongly] that of a strong-willed girl standing on the edge od womanhood. And she is every girl who has ever longed to carry her innocence and wonder as a banner of pride into adulthood... something that so few of them ever succeed at doing. The effect is bittersweet and as fleeting as our own childhoods. Masterful.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

such nice wording..."scintilla longings chewed my lips"

mmm

scrumptious melody this one creates

jacob

[Phibby Venable]

thank you so much Jacob!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Such a moving and endearing piece of writing... I believe you have this same effect on many that read you.

[Phibby Venable]

thank you, Dale! your words mean a lot to me.

[The Rock And Roll Cowboy(REBEL WITH A CAUSE)]

You are welcome.

[Michael G.]

A very lovely, loving write.

[Phibby Venable]

thank you so much, Michael, for such a fine comment

[Emily B]

i used to know a poet who wrote about the hills and mountains, her words felt like home to me

now she is a poet for the entire world, she knows the seas and valleys, the far reaches, all the beautiful places, she is vast and wise

[Phibby Venable]

thank you, Emily, and i imagine, every place she goes, she keeps a piece of you with her to reflect upon when something good and beautiful is needed

[Marie Anzalone]

agreed and agreed and AGREED

[Ken Simm.]

and what truly lovely remarks they are. To someone special obviously. These words could break hearts or mend them.

[Phibby Venable]

thank you, Ken, for such a fine comment xxx