Riding On Long Trains

Riding On Long Trains

A Poem by Phibby Venable

 

There are very few complexities on trains
and this one passes Crone Mountain, slow
as the cars gather momentum and the countryside
slides into blue & green & sometimes earth
tones blurring in the early fog that lifts
somewhere close to Charlottesville

 

We are still outside the big cities and flowers bend
to flutter in sporadic places that scatter & fade
as we bear closer north, where rivers and concrete
replace the stout wooden stations
The train turns electric and efficient, no-one
gets off to smoke & the voices hurry past
smooth southern syllables into the curt clean
containment of polished emphasis

 

I am riding a long train, ten hours so far & Boston
is still far enough way for me to drowse
half awake in the solitude, watching lives moving
on and off, their individual trains

© 2012 Phibby Venable


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Great piece depicts vividly a great journey.
Reminds John Denver of Virginia who introduced his country to the world by his song,"Country Road Take Me Home"
Could you find any way to omit " &" ?
It hurts eyes.

Posted 12 Years Ago


zainul

12 Years Ago

You are very cooperative,Phibby.
Thanks a lot.
It helps nicely.
zainul

12 Years Ago

I have visited all the three websites you mentioned.
I have chosen Lulu for sign up/registrati.. read more
Phibby Venable

12 Years Ago

At the first three places you must submit your work and hope they like it. Regular publishing. At Lu.. read more
When I moved from California to Pennsylvania I took the train... I figured it would be a good way to see America and appreciate more of the beauty I hadn't seen yet, I was right. So I can so relate to this fine piece.

Posted 12 Years Ago


i rode a long train once, the best adventure

Posted 12 Years Ago


I am reminded of 'The Spirit of New Orleans' Woody Guthrie. I am reminded that I do a lot of my thinking on trains. And I am reminded that you are a consumate artist.

Posted 12 Years Ago


thank you for dropping in and sharing the heart of phibby with us...you are the master, truly

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Phibby Venable
Phibby Venable

abingdon, VA



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http://youtu.be/25XE-BHGvWI http://youtu.be/B2klgDKMUq0 I live in the mountains of Southwest Virginia. Although my passion is poetry, I recently published a novel called, Women of the Round Tabl.. more..

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