Let's stay forever

Just hold your breath as we fall in love

I just want you to know
right now
that we're here
together

Let's not be alone
under the star spattered sky
we're wishing on
for expectations to come true

Make the most of this
you smiled
before lips touched
and eyes closed

So can we prove them wrong
and stay like this forever
in love

Author's Note

I got kissed by a very cute (and yes very gay) guy today, so I'm a pile of romantic mush right now. :D

Reviews

AWWWWW that was sweet! Its good to let emotions flow like that.

[Last Minute Lani]

ohhhhhhhhh i love that line "so lets prove them wrong"
its so like BAM!!

[Lily E. Lin]

Wonderful imagery, especially the lines "star spattered sky" and the last two verses. Its short, but its conciseness works. The only suggest I have to make, which would be more of a personal preference really is the contractions (when read visually) kind of stop the flow a little, like hiccups in a stream. It sounds better when read, but I feel like it would create a bigger impact if in this particular case, contractions were not used altogether. But then again, that's probably more of a personal preference of mine. All in all, good work!

And odd, random side track, I think I was told by a somewhat drunk guy that I had assumed was gay this last saturday that he liked me, so didn't take it seriously, and then found out afterward that he might be bi... so perhaps the same will be true for your situation? Which is probably much less awkward than mine.