Brother

Brother

by. Pharos

I can't help what I'm feeling, 

If only I could, I would have.

I can't help what I'm feeling,

I'd love you if only I could.

So don't tell me you love me,

If you never knew what it means.

So don't tell me you love me,

Cause I never felt the same.

Everything is already broken,

And no one is to be blamed.

The only thing that could be,

Is for us to be set free.

Reviews

[Sarah Cristobal]

I'm a little new to critiquing poetry but as a fellow poet here's my best shot. : D

I like the content, the idea. I feel like we need way more details though. It's too vague for me. For example: How do you know he never knew what it meant, is there a moment in time that you really felt that? What does the brother act like, mannerisms, habits that chill your love for him?

Favorite line: Everything is already broken/ and no one is to be blamed

Hope this helps!!!
Sarah

[Pharos]

Thank you for the feedback! I intended the writing to be more of how man unfortunately, inherited the curse of murdering their fellow men and how we could not learn how to love one another because of our differences. And thank you again for reading!