The Wanderer

The Wanderer

A Poem by Ellusive Rose
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This poem explains itself.

"

Forced to wander the streets alone

With no place to call home

Memories of the past

Flooding my mind with misery

 

Mama, Papa screaming

Back and forth

A never ending battle

My brother Sam holding on tight

To my hips in the corner

Of the blackened room

Papa lashed out

A gun in hand

One shot Two

Mama was dead

 

Sam and I on the run

Trying not to be killed by

The silver gun

Papa running like a wolf

Hunting for it's dinner for the night

A station down the block

Feet not touching the ground anymore

All was over from there

 

Sam's grip loosed from me

Seperated

His face fading from my mind

Now I wander these streets alone

Remebering misery's past of home

 

The Wanderer

© 2009 Ellusive Rose


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Ellusive Rose
Anything goes

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Excellent, great scene played out. It would be a wonderful base for a story. You have talent for pacing an action scene, and informing background through out good work

Posted 15 Years Ago


Nice job, though I do hope it is just a story...

Luna

Posted 15 Years Ago


Ooh I like the new line choice, gives it a reminicing(can't spell that) touch...Love it!


Posted 15 Years Ago


I really liked it-the poem had a good flow and the story was very well told.
One thing; I didn't really think the line "Yes we were indeed" really fitted. It seemed to almost add a comical edge that I didn't think quite fitted. Maybe you could change it to something like "His face fading from view" or something. Just a suggestion :) And I really did like it.

Posted 15 Years Ago



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Added on July 6, 2009
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Ellusive Rose
Ellusive Rose

Valley Stream, NY



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Hi, i am a 16 year old girl who loves to write and draw more than anything. Im just starting out with writng stories, so please don't be hard on me okay? That doesn't mean leave out important deta.. more..

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