Odyssey

Odyssey

A Poem by Elisa
"

My hero is finally home

"

The first light of day
The first breeze of morning
Lift you off your calloused feet
And carry you toward me


As if you're floating on air

But you're not here, you shall be here soon

Because I am missing you dearly.


I stand on jagged cliffs...waiting...
My outstretched arms 
and a chorus of gentle waves
are anxious to welcome you home


I began to worry that you will never

Show

Because my hands are getting tired

My heart is getting cold


Where is the sun 

that warms my frigid heart? 
I see him at last, 
his face blurred in the distance. 

It looks as if you've been in a battle
I can just see the war in your eyes
But I need you here by my side
No where else, just here in my eyes

© 2015 Elisa


Author's Note

Elisa
Thank you so much to Emily for doing this collab with me and putting up with my craziness! You're a wonderful person and writer :)

My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

Kinda hoped it would end without a happy ending. But hey, I'm a Debbie Downer like that. Call me old fashioned, but I like it when people die in what would otherwise be a romantic poem or story.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Elisa

9 Years Ago

Haha I totally get you. Shakespeare must be your guy then!
Jordan

9 Years Ago

That guy killed EVERYONE. I'm not THAT merciless. :D ...actually I like killing my characters. So no.. read more
Wow this is so amazing. I loved it. Keep it up.

Posted 9 Years Ago


Elisa

9 Years Ago

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it!
wow....beautiful poetry! Seeing war in your eyes.....what an apt phrase! It is one thing to have war in one's eyes....but it takes a perceptive observer to be able to see it......we do not have to fight in Vietnam or Iraq to have been through wars.....the girl next door....the guy at the grocery counter, all have their own types of PTSD........but it takes eyes of love to see it........lovely writing!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Elisa

9 Years Ago

Yes I completely agree with you! Thank you so much for your insight, as usual!
Your words blend together so well, it is impossible to tell this was written by two poets. A beautiful collaboration, rich with imagery.

:) Julie

Posted 9 Years Ago


Elisa

9 Years Ago

Thank you so very much Julie! I really appreciate it!
MsJewel

9 Years Ago

my pleasure
A little typo's found here: "It's looks as if you've been in a battle".

"It looks" or "Its look" or "It's look".

Very beautiful poem it is. Loved the imagery. You write it with heart & speak well to its pages. Glad your "Mr. Someone" is finally home to take you off the cliff.. beyond the region.

Fly well. Don't get landed unsafe. (smiling).

Posted 9 Years Ago


Elisa

9 Years Ago

Thank you very much! :D
Um yes, this was written so gracefully. Great collab between Emily and yourself!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Elisa

9 Years Ago

Thank you! :D

Share This
Email
Facebook
Twitter
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

428 Views
6 Reviews
Rating
Added on April 10, 2015
Last Updated on April 16, 2015
Tags: love, romance, loyalty, waiting, war, home, return

Author

Elisa
Elisa

Los Angeles, CA



About
Hello everyone! I really appreciate you stopping by! I post new poems every Monday and Friday, so feel free to check them out and let me know what you think. Thank you so much, and have an awesome day.. more..

Writing
Doubt Pt. 2 Doubt Pt. 2

A Poem by Elisa


Healed Healed

A Poem by Elisa



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..


Drowning Drowning

A Poem by gabiaimee