Beach

For Victoria

I sit far away from you

on a hill of powdery sand

Inhaling slowly, listening 

to your feet patter on wet ground

As I protect my eyes

from a desperate sun

I can see in the distance

your softened silhouette

Jealous of your grace, 

the waves try to consume you

But smiling, you float gently

On the expanse of rippling glass

Neither the song of the deep

nor the whisps of cloud above

can avert my endless gaze

from your shadow embraced by mist

With each breath you take, 

Another night without sleep

Flies far from recollection

Into the line where sky fades into sea

You turn to me, 

your hair softly sifting,

but I dare not corrupt

this dream with my presence

So here I will stay

Blind in the haze of your beauty

And blessed with a sight

I can dream of for a long, long time. 

Author's Note

I hope you all enjoyed this poem, inspired by a trip to the beach with my really close friends. Thanks for stopping by, and have a great day!
<3 Elisa

Reviews

[613]

This was a very visual piece & it flowed incredibly well. Nicely done!

- Brittney

P.S. Would you mind checking out my novel, HIM? Before sending it off for publishing, I'd love it if I could have as much constructive criticism as possible. (:

[Elisa]

Thanks so much lovely! Sure thing I will :)

[613]

You're welcome & thank you!

[Mayank]

I recently visited beach, in fact it's one of longest beach in India. Sitting there, with my thoughts mixed in whiff of air gave me similar experience. Serendipity.

[Elisa]

Aren't beaches lovely? Thank you so much for reviewing!

[E G TEN]

Grew up in an island surrounded by beautiful beaches,,now i live in a desert,, :-( Thanks for sharing this
Lovely poem brings back lots and lots of memories :-) :-P

[Elisa]

Thank you! I'm glad I got to bring back some fond memories :)

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

awsome work. i enjoyed it very much

[Elisa]

Thanks Nonu :)

[Harpreet kaur bajwara]

your welcome

[Sourav]

Lovely last stanza to end the poem. Nice picture you've depicted with your words... readers can feel it. Nice poem.

[Elisa]

Thank you :D

[nazia]

I love beaches. Especially with the unsaid feelings that you expressed here,its suddenly made me go for a stroll sometime soon. Great write Elisa :)

[Elisa]

Thank you :)

[Horizons]

Finally you uploaded the poetry written upon beach... `bout the 'fish' - Victoria. Nice one. Sometimes, capturing beauty of nature in eyes & well slipping `em down in words`s seemed like an interesting art itself to blow along winds... & you`ve well rendered this art to your pages by the means of shaping such art with words. Interesting write.

Ps. I reviewed the write. (smile)

[Elisa]

Thank you :)

[Nadia Gerassimenko]

Some subjects are better left as they are - undisturbed and immaculate. They're better to be observed with fancy from afar and may perturb the essence of their exquisite silhouette, shadow if approached.

[Elisa]

Yes! You totally understand me! Thank you for the insightful review!

[Justin]

that is awesome :) :) u did a really great job on it :)

[Elisa]

Aww thanks Justin!

[Justin]

your welcome elisa, if you have time, would you please check out my material thanks :)

[Emily]

Lovely wording!
Well done!

[Elisa]

Thank you :)