I wrote this as a rap-style poem, perhaps a bridge for some song. It's thematically inspired by Linkin Park, and the poem is not personal. But, please, be honest and tell me what you think of it.
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I cringed a little at the rhyming in the first stanza but I applaud the audacity of the piece and the originality mixed with a good nod to its influence. Its mostly well stated and fast flowing. Its self-contained and says all it needs in a small piece, which you are good at. You pulled this off well but there is still some awkwardness to it, your reaching is apparent but it looks like if you tried you could get really good with this style and its always a plus for poets to experiment. Overall its good at what it is but not as good as what you do best.
well i like the rhythm of it and how it all flows together, in my mind i put it with my relationship with one of my "close" guy friends so i could completely imagine the visual you were putting togethe rin my mind. awesome!!!!!!!!
Dark with hints of violence. Truthfully, I think this is really really good., great actually. Nice rhyming and rhythm, perfect for what you stated you're aiming for.
I cringed a little at the rhyming in the first stanza but I applaud the audacity of the piece and the originality mixed with a good nod to its influence. Its mostly well stated and fast flowing. Its self-contained and says all it needs in a small piece, which you are good at. You pulled this off well but there is still some awkwardness to it, your reaching is apparent but it looks like if you tried you could get really good with this style and its always a plus for poets to experiment. Overall its good at what it is but not as good as what you do best.