Rain of Blood

Now here is a poem that ACTUALLY didn't take me 30 minutes to write. Mostly because the lack of inspiration

A breeze is blowing slowly, on the wake of our destruction,

Thunder's roar is growing louder, with the flash of its conduction.

Sky is getting darker, with each second that passes,

Shadow covers cities, and their fearing masses.

My destiny embraced, the time is coming nigh,

The land will become red, when angels begin to cry.

Resistance seems futile, we get what we deserve,

Heaven's wrath's upon us, God does no longer observe.

Drops of red are washing away each and every sin,

Souls torn from bodies, emotions ripped through skin.

The purpose of existence, throughout time held in sway,

Now stands amiss, by rain of blood carried away.

Grasping for the last breath, my hand reaches for yours,

An act in vain before the closing of our lives' doors.

Earth cracks below us, revealing the depths of fire,

A portion of souls descend below, a portion raises higher.

Cataclysm rages on, unleashing its full power,

Afterwards a new world will bloom, like a spring flower.

And before forfeiting the strife, I saw a twinkle in your eye,

My last thought hurt the most: I'm not ready to die.

Author's Note

I thought about telling you guys how do I imagine the story here, but I'll leave that for you to interpret. Also, this is not meant to be a love poem, although it contains some motives that may give you the impression - that was just a scene that took place in my head and I thought that it would be cool.

Reviews

[forevermore1218]

This is really good man :)
I love how you formatted everything you wanted to say into these verses and made each one similar, yet made each one their own. I like specifically the last one "My last thought hurt the most: I'm not ready to die." I don't know if this was your intention, but I thought that gave a sign of hope showing that you aren't ready to give up.
Great Job!!!!!

btw, I think this would make a really good linkin park song. I am really tempted to steal this and send it to them jk jk :)

[Legolas]

This is excellent. Your vocabulary is so rich. The description of the events is so real. Great job buddy:)

[MoriartyMesa]

This reminds me of early 80's metal, Like the Scorpions. Like just add the drums, metal, smoke, Whiskey, guitar, groupies and this could be Head lining concert.

[Meagan]

That poem is f****n awesome...XD

[Simmirose]

the imagery is extremely powerful, when reading it i saw it play out in my mind. great choice of words. love the rhyme scheme. very deep. absolutely love it! Exceptional job!

[closed..acct]

Very nicely done!
I loved the rhyming scheme.
Awesome write!

[SuicidePact.]

very deep, loved the poem, loved the title. this was great

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful description create some wild visions of pain and healing. I like the use of the rain of blood to give strength and purpose to the poem. I like the ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Angelic Surrender]

This is so deep. I love it. Great work :)