Layers

The ink convolutes

on paper white

 

I can hear the running water

beneath the wooden bridge

The portal must be open

 

Strokes for castles

woods alive

maybe these are dreams

 

It's a marvellous new world

 

Another page

a papercut

 

Black is all I see

with that hint of red

 

The sun that warmed my body

dripping blood on me

It’s a mistery

 

Author's Note

Haven't posted anything in a while (and to be honest, haven't written any poetry in a while). Feels good to return to things I enjoyed before.

Reviews

[Tomislav Petricevic]

I thoroughly loved this piece, and I tell you why; "first of all you speak of the world in all bliss, green and love and life, then next, you give it such on your last stanza's a turn, I was mesmerized. truly was.

I like when writers do that to me. It has power, friend.
It has.. thank you for sharing this brilliant pearl.

- Elisa

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thank you very much for your kind words!
Regarding the turn, I wanted to show that sinister presence that sometimes overtakes people and makes you wonder who they really are. You don't know why they're acting like that and you were certain they were these beautiful people before, but now they're something else.
Of course, it's perfectly fine if you interpreted it differently, that's the beauty of writing/reading. :)

Very welcome always. :)

[Cid]

I felt the warmth, the pain of love and the burning fires of blood by your words.
...
Keep up the great work!

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thank you!

[Brittany Zedalis]

This is kind of dark and very well done. :)

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thank you! :D

[Invisible]

intersting my young old friend

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thanks! :D

[devon]

Your writing shows no evidence of a break! My favorite lines are "I can hear the running water/beneath the wooden bridge/The portal must be open". They give off an imagine of a quaint, medieval village. I'm not quite sure as to why. Maybe it's because the wording reminds me of an old children's rhyme. As always, very great writing. It's nice to see you back!

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Hey there! :D Thanks for the review! :D
Yeah, I imagined a medieval village with a nice forest nearby while I was writing, so you got that perfectly right. :D

[devon]

Wow! That's pretty neat. :) And you're very welcome!

[Robert Small]

A good write. The sun warmed my body, dripping blood on me, it's a mystery.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thanks for taking your time to read it!