Stranded Prayer

I wrote some sort of a Christian song!

The broken world won't fix itself,

The people pray and ask for help.

Their hands have worked until they've bled,

Their hands have wiped the tears they've shed.

To You they come in time of need,

To You they come their child to feed.

The answer found within Your word,

To heal the wounds of dying herd.

Solace found or solace lost,

Results don't show without the cost.

The cost unseen and holds no name,

The cost that sets pure hearts aflame.

“For how can He not give us hope,

For how can He not cut the rope?

The rope is tied around our necks,

Yet He will not destroy this hex.”

But they don't know what strength they've gained,

Since their whole lives they had been chained.

I ask of You just one thing now,

I ask despite avoiding plough.

Hear their cries and lips that moan,

Hear their cries and not my own.

Since my path chose to strand from light,

And ended in these words I write.

Author's Note

I'm not religious at all, but I kinda got inspiration for this, so I decided to write it down.

Reviews

[Suditi]

It's a beautiful poem. I really like the tone, the essence of the poem.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thank you :)

[Emily B]

like a dirge, it marches along joyless in destruction

i seldom find a use for rhyme, but this was perfect

[Magdalena Nuspahic]

ponavljas ''Their hands'' ''To You they come'' ''The cost'' ''For how can He'' ''I ask'' ''Hear''

me gusta mucho :3

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Aha, vidiš, potpuno sam zaboravio da sam radio to ponavljanje. XD

Hvala! :3

[Sasha]

OMG....that was so beautiful. The flow of the poem was so smooth. Great poem indeed.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thank you! :D

[anamezic]

You are from Croatia! I am also! Pricas li Hrvatski?
Ja zivim u Americi ali posjetcam Hrvatsku svako lijeto.

You write very well!

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Da, pričam hrvatski! :D Lijepo je upoznati još nekoga!
Hvala na review-u! :D

[Invisible]

ah yes, I know exactly what you mean, and quite agree, at least 90% lol.

[Poussiere D'Ange]

And Tomislav scores once again 'high fives'..:-):-):-D.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

*high fives you back*
Thank you! :D

[She With Eyes Like Unsh..]

Beautiful poem with a sad ending. Wonderful write.

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thank you. :)

[Talal Hussain]

Great write buddy,keep the good work going :-)

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thanks! :D