She

Depression, she who troubles everyone at some point of their lives.

She is the strongest person you've met,

Emotions burst when she is present,

Your only friend around any threat,

Repelling the intense feeling of resent.

Having her around inflicts hate upon you,

Yet her absence would end your life,

The help that was needed away you threw,

Only twisting the sharp, cold knife.

You've been a fool- I can clearly see,

She isn't a person, but a spreading sickness,

Her name is depression, her shape is a key,

Unlocking the gate to sorrow and weakness.

A w***e I shall call her! You're not the first,

Many have been slain by her blade,

So clear your mind and find the thirst

For starting a rebellion, a soul raid.

Patience is the virtue you need to embrace,

Since dealing with her is not an easy task,

But at the end you will get a new face,

And proudly discard that horrible mask.

Author's Note

I've seen a lot of people struggling with that one lately, so I thought I'd write something about it. It probably won't make any of them feel better, though. xD
Anyways, I've been struggling with this piece for some time, so if you think there may be some improvements I could make, feel free to say so.
Arigato.

Reviews

[R.A. Youngblood]

This is my favorite of you! Deep, emotional, hateful, painful..
Yeah, she is a f*****g w***e, you're not the only one slain by her blade :/. I like your choice of words, i u 3 kitici se točno otkriva tko je zapravo ona. Haha, na početku sam mislila da govoriš o nekoj super dark killing woman until i read the other stanzas xD.. I specially like the ending, jer se tamo jedino pojavljuje nada:
"But at the end you will get a new face,
And proudly discard that horrible mask."
Sorry ako te smeta moje mješanje jezika u review-u, just have to. :P
Thanks for sharing this awesomeness, keep it up buddy :D

[forevermore1218]

just one word can describe this poem in my opinion: beautiful

I beg you, write more like this. This is one of my favorite poems I have ever read on this site. Legit.

-forevermore1218

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thank you very much! I might write some more when the inspiration kicks in. :D

[forevermore1218]

hey, I only speak the truth :)

[NaomiJim]

I love this.

[Lost in Wonderland]

Yes many struggke with this topic. Full of hurt and a sense of betrayal and heartbreak. Well done!
God Bless
~Mickey

[Irene]

this is a beautiful piece of writing. the last line is my favourite...it makes me want to discard my own mask.

[Hidden Happiness]

really good and an amazing use of words..funny how 'she' refers to beauty as well as depression:):):).

[Jane Doe]

I really like this... It's given me hope none the less that soon maybe I won't hate myself and the world around me and I won't cry myself to sleep anymore.(:
Thank you it's an amazing piece in my perspective and I hope it gives others hope as well and inspiration

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thank you very much. I am so glad you liked it! :)

[Pax]

good job, emotional and a little dark.

[DA]

Very good poem. I found it the intensity and the rhymes perfect! I really liked it, well done ;)

[♪The Girl Next Do..]

This is so good. Really. I can't even...this is is too good for words. Each line came at me with intensity, a need to be heard! I love it!!

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Thanks, bestie! :D

[♪The Girl Next Door♪]

Not a problem, BFF :)