Concealed Venom

Concealed Venom

A Poem by Tomislav Petricevic
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There is a beautiful forest with a stunning river, but is the water really as it seems?

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In the depths of a bright green forest,

Where the gusts create a gentle shiver,

Stands a snake among the beauty,

To the mortal eye- a river.


Tasty expanses it reveals,

To a sore throat a huge temptation,

But those who greedily dive inside,

Come to a contrary revelation.


The water makes a frigid blast,

Its content now a venom so foul,

Acid eats the leaves with pleasure,

Silencing down every howl.


The forest shows its true shape-

Withered branches, destroyed earth,

Mother nature spills her tears,

For the child she cherished since birth.


I leave you with a warning, stranger:

Not every water can be cured,

So feel not bad for giving up,

Instead of finding yourself lured.

© 2012 Tomislav Petricevic


Author's Note

Tomislav Petricevic
Hint: The purpose of this poem isn't describing the nature.
All reviews are welcome. It would be interesting to see your interpretations.
Thank you.

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First off, this is a beautiful poem. The rhyming is not forced, it flows from stanza to stanza, an most of all, has an inner meaning.
The poem reminds me of my favorite flower, the rose. The poem implies that the river seems beautiful and perfect to the "mortal eye", but when you 'dive' deeper you realize that it too has thorns.
A reminder to all, everything has its thorns and blossoms. The trick is to enjoy the blossoms and keep from the thorns!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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the poem can speak in many ways
the journey of life
the changing nature because of man
and a lot
I enjoy this
=]

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can see the symbolism vividly as you describe what one see's is not what one gets, and walking in others shoes may not be what we once saw it as. I like your writing alot! keep up the good work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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This is amazing. I love it.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Yes!! Don't judge a book by it's cover! I loved this! Awesome!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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i like the deep meaning of this, or should i say for me as i understand it.
mother nature and her children is slowly declining, and some people taken it
for-granted

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The weapon that yeilds dormant hands, well done.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I absolutely love it! It, to me, shows how dangerous and deadly a beautiful piece can be to others who are entranced by it's beauty. But, to the eyes that can see past that beauty, know the truth behind it's mask. :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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this is really awesome dude! I like your second verse the best and the trivia you put behind this piece of art. The only thing I would change is just rearrrange your puncuation a little bit and that's it.

Well done ma friend :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


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I LOVEEEE the 1st and 4th stanzas.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i love your style. i loved the imagery and the subject matter, too.
thanks for sharing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


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Added on July 10, 2012
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Tags: concealed, venom, poetry, poem, cold, nature, river, poison, snake, acid, forest, destroy, earth, mother, people

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Tomislav Petricevic
Tomislav Petricevic

Slavonski Brod, Slavonija, Croatia



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