Ocean of Sadness

 

one day

I was breathing in the ocean

and so I tasted the salt

made out of tears

that washed away

the sacrificed joy of pyramids

into the Nile

 

that day

I heard the quiet cry 

of the oppressed and lonely people

throwing their hopes

into the Ganges

and making it forever muddy

 

and then

 

I smelled the screams

of the majestic Amazon

where with no mercy

pawn brokers of human souls

shackled away the last remaining dream

 

in disperation

my lips have avidly touched

the banks of the beloved Mississippi

still tarnished

by innocent Indian blood

 

exhausted by sadness

I felt the gasp

of the broken Danube

forever exiled into the Delta

forgotten by men

 

as I was breathing in

the salty tears

so often

washed away by the rivers

into an ocean of sadness

that harvested

the sins of the world

 

I was finally

blessed and relieved

by the sweet bitterness

of the eternal

and

most holy Jordan

Reviews

[john alan willox]

very nice - may i humbly request that you read my poem - "as a river" Thanks for writing.

[Petra Vlah]

I just read it and liked it a lot Send me more requests anytime you feel like it

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write...Thank you for sharing...:)

[Petra Vlah]

So glad you liked it, Sami. Encouraged by the kind reviews I had in just a few days since I joined this site, I will be posting more poems soon

[Sami Khalil]

Welcome to the family. Please send some read requests...:)

[Petra Vlah]

I don't even know how to do that...Not only am I knew to the site, I am also technologically handicapped (LOL)

[Sami Khalil]

Look at the right corner of your poem. Click on read request. It will take you to your friends page. You have to ask to be friends with anyone you like. Click on each box by their name untill you finish selecting. Then it will tell you to send ... Then it will tell you to close. That's it...
Good luck...:)
You have to have a friends list on your site...:)

[Petra Vlah]

Thank you so much, I will do that from now on

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[lee von cleef]

A tour of ending in our humanity, I spent my time well, just now.

[Petra Vlah]

Thank you lee, the tears, the suffering, the hopes and joy of others makes us evermore human

[Onku Ghosh]

Exquisitely beautiful !!!I like the idea of introducing the mighty rivers into your writing to highlight the miseries of the people.This poem is refreshingly different and made a brilliant read.Thanks for sharing.

[Petra Vlah]

Thank you Onku. By carrying out into the ocean our suffering the rivers are also purifying us and in the end, there is hope - The Jordan of faith

[The Blood Poet]

Brilliant! A wondrous work of art. Truly beautiful. Such talent and grace on the page. Wonderful form.

[Petra Vlah]

Thank you Storma. I wrote this poem years ago and almost forgot about it until I read your exquisite poem about the way we are all connected by breathing the same air, by walking the same path, by being one without even realizing

[The Blood Poet]

Its funny how some of our treasures can be forgotten. The poem you speak of "Old Soles" was a forgotten poem as well. I guess we will endeavor to inspire each other to dig up and share our forgotten treasures.

[Petra Vlah]

Your poem "Old Souls" should be entered in the poetry contest I posted on the forum. It should win you the Grand Prize and another published book

[Astro]

Great use of bodies of water to highlight human suffering internally and globally. The flow is carried easily in the format you've given the lines of each section. I'm sure it would have greater impact to the reader if they had been to these beautiful parts of the world in turmoil. Well done.

[Petra Vlah]

Thank you Astro. We, the people of the world are really the rivers of the 5 continents I mentioned and we know about suffering and misery, sadness and sorrow, hope and joy. Even without touching each other's hand we are connected in a body of souls

[Astro]

So very true.

[Vincent Moore]

You brought these mighty bodies of water together in harmony. I visualized each one and its majesty. All of my senses were enlightened by your flow of words as the currents swept me from one to another. Yes indeed these waters have seen bitterness, salty tears, sadness, frustration, death and rebirth. History has swept before them and still they stand strong, while man has turned to dust. Bravo my friend, very well written and expressed.

[Petra Vlah]

I believe in the purifying power of water that through its continuous cycle touches all of us and makes us ONE