Simply Sad Senryus

How not to.....?

                  

Failure

                          

                          Poignancy- pungent,

                          I crack the puzzletree nut,

                          spilling the pathos.

 

Another Failure

                          I`m an idiot

                          trying to extract more juice

                          from profundity

 

Yet Another Failure

 

                          The venting of spleen

                ain`t even excuses

                for poems, OK?

 

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

Simply Sad Senryus'
Pete Langley,
Your short to the point positions sit so well in this style poem. Iv'e not written in this style a whole lot. It is really fun to see the style that fits a writer's personality. This works. I will say that the point made above being 'what works for a poem may not feel right but it's all about who is reading it. A little light heartedness goes a long way. This made me smile cause I don't want to take myself to serously. Thank you for that.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Einstein Noodle]

we write and we writhe to twist all we can from a glimmer .. last one is in stark contrast as pertains to language .. it kind of surprises me coming from an English gentleman :) .. and Peter I must say again how glad I am you are back!
E.

[Pete Langley]

So sorry, Gene. I`m late with these acknowledgements.....and I`m far from being an English gent, I assure you!

[h d e rushin]

because Pete we judge poets, as we do quarterbacks, by how well they can spin it. So abstraction
takes the place of substance every time. So a device consisting of two or more radial vanes capable of rotating on a spindle is a fly, yes that same creepy fellow lying dead on the windowsill I cleaned.
Is profundity the goal instead of the folds? I sure hope like hell it's not.

love this.....dana

[Pete Langley]

So glad you visited, Dana....and left such a telling comment. When to call a spade a spade and when to wrap it up in sacking.....then how many layers? Ha ha the more stuff I write, the more unsure I am. Thanks again, love. P.

[Brendan McCallum]

I do so like these little things, often pinned the poor cousin of Haiku, I have been playing with the form for a little while now and find them more difficult than ku to some degree.... not enough people get excited by them for some reason, the mere fact that human nature and satire can be combined makes it a perfect form in my view........ nice work...... Bren

[Pete Langley]

Thanks Bren. I`d written these at different times and posted them separately about a year ago....then suddenly realised they were really a sequence and made more sense that way - which in some ways dilutes them individually, I s`pose! P.

[icelandicblue]

And yet that failure never stops us. We are often our most ardent critics. You capture the process and angst well.

[Pete Langley]

Glad you liked this, Anne. Thanks love. P.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

maybe we try just a bit too hard to extract more profunidity than actually lies within our pens....

i like how these lie separate, yet work together as a team of "sad senryus"---
jacob

[Pete Langley]

Yeah....I`d written these separately at different times, then suddenly realised that they seem to work as a sequence....I`m hoping well enough to get into Frogpond ( keep your fingerrs crossed for me!) Thanks mate. P.