A flickering flame

Love poetry... old style / new style

Oh... you tormented soul...

You specter that haunts me all through the night...

My dear one… my most beloved one…

If only you could trust these words…

 

Truly in the world to me…

Never has been fairer than you…

And no one will ever be!

 

My sweet love…

From such a far away place…

If only my words could comfort you…

Like a soft embrace…

 

If my words could warm you up…

And nourish your body and soul, like food…

If only I could fly away and save you…

Instead of always circling the hood.

 

My love… if only I didn’t drink so much…

Smoked so much…

Indulge in all the pleasures…

A true hedonist with many treasures...

 

My sweet love…

The sweetest I’ve ever found…

Why do you cry?

Why do you frown?

 

My love, my beloved…

Our love is a flickering flame…

The wind keeps trying to put us out…

Such a shame, and vain pain…

 

Can we outstand the storm, my love?

Can we ever survive?

It’s dying every day my love…

Like you’ve never even been alive.

 

Ah, this old growing pain…

It’s no stranger to me…

Felt it a few times…

Know it, by name.

 

Yes… sad… forever apart…

Ah… My Juliet of the broken heart…

If only these words could touch you…

And caress you, and feel you.

 

If only my words could reach you…

And always protect you and keep you safe…

Like an insane love prayer…

Done in such a hurry, and such a haste.

 

There are no words to describe my loved one…

No words in no dictionary, could ever explain…

This aching always growing pain…

That make some… almost fall insane.

 

My beautiful…

I will love you forever…

Even after we die…

Even after all the stars…

Just fall off, from the sky…

Author's Note

I hope you'll enjoy this one...

I certainly did...

Reviews

[Bhuyanshi Talukdar]

I read your poem and I can feel the pain and longing in your words. It seems like you are deeply in love with someone who is far away, and you wish you could be there to comfort them. Your words are full of emotion and you express your love so beautifully.

I can sense that you are struggling with some personal demons, but your love for this person is so strong that it shines through in your poetry. You ask if you can outstand the storm and survive, and I believe that you can. Love is a powerful force that can help us overcome even the most difficult challenges.

Your words are a testament to the power of love and how it can endure even when we are apart from the ones we love. Keep writing and expressing yourself, for it is through your words that you can touch the hearts of others.

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Once again, thank you so much.

Unfortunately I am without internet at home.
And my computer broke down... Lol

I will try to show up often.

Bl

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Blessed be!

[NelliKong]

I felt the emotion from the first line of the poem. You were very vulnerable in this piece; I appreciate you letting the reader into your world. Keep writing.

[The_Ancient_Rock]

As always thank you for your awesome review.

Blessed be

[Betty Hermelee]

With all the love you show to her, it seems as though she cannot be comforted….no matter how many words you say to her about love, nourishment, there is regret there…it seems though your words are not reaching her ears…. Her heart….sad, but maybe some hope as well…nicely written…
Best, B

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Thank you so much B.

Yes... I'm afraid that might just be the case...

Words can only really go that far...

Even though we do try...

Awesome review... Thank you again!!!

;)

[Betty Hermelee]

you're very welcome!
Best, B

[Aura]

This is so beautiful, it speaks of regret of perhaps not being able to comfort your loved one with these words you have to offer them. When you have so much to say, and they are not here to listen, but they are somewhere, listening I think. Love can often flicker, when it seems as if all forces are against you, but fighting against all forces, will not strengthen love. Thanks for sharing, I enjoyed sharing!

[The_Ancient_Rock]

"but fighting against all forces, will not strengthen love..."

We should always fight for love...

But sometimes it can be very difficult...

My love is strong enough... but hers might not be...

She's in a worse situation than me, that's true.

And she had it worse than me in the past...

Yes, I wish my words could comfort her...

But it seems like... no words will ever be enough...

I can't change the past.

Thank you for your amazing review!

;)

[Aura]

You are most welcome.

[Chris Shaw]

This is certainly a love piem. An outpouring of emotions here. I am seeing a more serious side to your poetry Ancient. You have penned this well. All good wishes.

Chris

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Thank you Chris...

This one... certainly is an interesting one...

I'm so glad you enjoyed my poetry!!!

Thank you so much, Chris.

;)

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome :)

[willweb]

That is definitely love poem that reveals the deepest and darkest desires of the poet. The longings, the wants and the needs because of this one person that has so captured the heart. Very well done.

[The_Ancient_Rock]

Thank you friend...

Yes Will, I really enjoyed writing this one...

Felt truly inspired... possessed almost...

If one could use such a word... :)

I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Thank you for the awesome review!

;)