All Wrong

it feals so wrong

nothings right

its all wrong

this isnt right

it feels as though it all just changed

i don't know who i am

 

they say there be there for me

but they won't

how couldn't they?

they wouldnt understabd

and after a while they'll give up

cause they dont understand

 

everythings wrong

what have they done to me

i remember now

 

this isn't right

were am i?

who am i?

its all wrong

nothing makes sens anymore

god help me!

 

Aileen Maltese7/06/08

Reviews

[lauren emily]

"this isn't right
were am i?
who am i?
its all wrong
nothing makes sens anymore
god help me!"
This is a very wonderful and powerful poem. I love the flow and the message it gives out.
Great work,
Lauren

[Lexy]

In the first stanza, I think instead of saying (technically writing) "I don't know where I am" you should put "I don't know WHO I am"
In the second stanza, first line, do you mean to say "... thEY'LL be there for me"? And you pressed "b" in understand instead of "n".
Not to be picky (or p*icky, if you know what I mean), but I do this just because I think you have great potential, and I like reading what you've written.