His Kiss

Heartbreak is more than an epidemic. It's an addiction. And he forced me into rehab.

By his lips

I dared remember

Through his kiss

I had let him into my heart chamber

 

With him I thought I was safe

Though too soon it was otherwise proved

When he left my lips began to chafe

I couldn't remember how my rough lips had once been smoothed

 

However things changed for the worse

As they always do

My heart  could not change its course

I hope one day I cannot remember you

 

 

Reviews

[SammyJammy]

Thank-you for the wonderful reviews (:
I did switch the first and second verse around. And I agree it is much better.
I also fixed my "it's" to "its" thank you very much for that out!

[Coyote Poetry]

A strong and powerful short poem. You brought us into the story and left us with yearning to forget.
Coyote

[Sydelle Houston]

I liked this poem, however I do have a suggestion. Why not place your second stanza first and see how it reads/flows? One typo: "it's" is the contraction of it is. Possessive is 'its.'

[Wolfbaby]

This was pretty good. I could really tell how you were feeling. Heartbreak is always painful. Good choice of words. It flowed well, but the rhythm was a little off. Other than that it was a good poem. Great job!

~Wolfbaby