Turning Back

Torn aside, you walk the lace in crescent moon at three a.m, I am still falling, you pass me by, I turn to your laurel lips, curving hips pressed as something inside me dies, somehow, whenever you're near, whenever I hear you smile, whenever these wanting hands guide me slowly, as your silence speaks from time to time again, time when ours was skin on skin, when the well in me was just to hear your voice, when the wish for seaman to break the sea, turning back I will search perhaps the last of winters for my lace that rained late silver blue.

Author's Note

Reviews

[Billy]

Interesting poem. Your words are quick and hurried, and carry passion without precision. That helps create a sense of disharmony and something desperately unrequited.

[Beren]

F... this is so intense and sweet!
"I am still falling, you pass me by"
This is full of love, feelings and everything. My English is not enough to describe how I'm feeling about this poem, just SO GOOD!

[Perdition]

A day in the woods with the touch of what should’ve happened can force heaven or hell into your passions or loss… without reason. I love to hate love the way love places you gone, without a forwarding address or that image of a kiss on a sunny afternoon ~

[Dessi]

If I pass by you, Perdition, I shall never pass you by.
Your voice speaks volumes without your lips moving.
The subject of your passion is, indeed, my envy.
The silver blue of your memory is my forever design.
This is so beautiful. Just beautiful.

[Perdition]

Finding these words to offer of appreciation for such kindness as thought by way of your review leaves me nearly lost in the rarity of silence Cam, ..never, ever let your passions be swayed, nor your talent betrayed by any reason. Poetry comes just as rare through review as by the poem and should never be diminished by lack come to any reason, nor the absence in its grace that raises from your voice, the rarity of talent will always be judged and questioned, as well as the welcomed breeze along with your kindness and passions released. Don't let anyone convince you otherwise as poetry knows not but of beauty and such ways of suffering through truth, just as the rising sun comes harshly through the darkness, so will the words of the reviewer, delivered by any source that might be rendered. Your review is as fresh-tempered as any poem you review..in short, many thanks graceful Poet~

[Dessi]

I'm lost in the beauty of your words as always. You deliver such a message, it reverberates in my heart, Perdition, never to be dismissed. Damn the message. Let me hear the words of this poet. Let these, your words, repair my soul. Perdition.

[Perdition]

Well, God does so love the sound of beaten hooves thundering so it might be time to “try a little try”again, so sorry for the delay but thanks for the loosening and the free reigns again~

[Dessi]

@Perdition... I know thee well. that though dost seek solitude in the mountains and tattoos, ect.

[Perdition]

Plenty of room for wilderness discussions and waterfalls that give inspiriatiions and black bears that live to follow and give well the summits where sweet the gatherings have sacred hidden green spaces to share great influence and who cares the

[Perdition]

Depth and potential invincibility. Poetry is within

[Perdition]

should you wish or hear the desire and calling! …. Always welcomed to its journey and i’m more than happy to brívthe Journal! You Are always a wonderful inspiration Dessi~

[Dessi]

Oh, Perdition. the ever dream and forever dreamer. Your life of no bounds and fighting spirit is to envy. But I am a city girl with a coward soul. I live through your words, D'Artagnan.

[Kelly Scheppers]

The well of words you draw from to fine tune what you are feeling is an inaccessible place, that most of us can only wish to venture into. It's been a while. Welcome back, Joseph!

[Perdition]

Had you looked down that "well" you might have helped me return earlier Kelly...lol. As always too kind and with a plethora of smiles at hand for my momentary return...I Have elephants and an Island upon which I must flee....ask no further questions as I am sworn to secrecy...lol. Hugs dear poet and Happy Hearts Day should I be back mysteriously missing yet again ;)

[Kelly Scheppers]

...thank you, darlin. Be safe, hurry back and have a happy hearts day!

[Amy R]

What a great write, emotions were felt throughout your poem.

This poem reflects on the emotional impact of a loved one, evoking feelings of nostalgia and yearning.

The imagery of the crescent moon and lace suggests fragility and beauty, emphasizing the fleeting nature of love and the pain of separation. Also the use of alliteration in phrases like "whenever you're near" and "silence speaks" enhances the musical quality of the poem...

Your poem captures the universal experience of longing for someone who has had a profound impact on one’s life, evoking empathy in us readers. Thanks for sharing such an authentic poem.

-Amy.

[Perdition]

Been on a bit of a hiatus lately but did not mean to ignore such a beautiful review and writer/poet. Loved every word and thank you so much Amy!!

[Amy R]

You're welcome, that's okay, keep good.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there is such a sensual nature to this poem...I knew a woman once...it was a very romantic and sensual relationship...but the long distance made it go asea and the ship got lost.
j.

[Perdition]

And in the bottle adrift, no land was found nor wished for centuries..thanks J.

[Poetic Beauty]

This reminds me of someone who is traveling through past adventures of the heart and mind; of a love. It comes creeping in under a moonlit sky.

[Perdition]

Such beautiful words, such a wonderful review...there is a place I go and all those wonderful adventures hover over me and I have to lift myself back...or wonder what the next to come may be if not the same and hopefully not but what is life but love? Hope all is well in your wonderfuls~

[Poetic Beauty]

Life has its trials and blessings. I am doing well.

[Perdition]

So happy to hear and sorry for the delay but unfortunately I was deep in the summits…. Hope the relationship is going fantastic and all and everything else is doing well. You truly are a wonderful talent Poetic Beauty!