Illusion

Illusion

A Poem by Perdition

          What is it 
                when the waters of the dream 
        seem still, 

             When the shutter speed 
                        slows to an August breeze, 
            
          When everything
                   begins and ends 
                         with midnight,    
          
          When the lens of our aura 
                   and the fine print of illusion
                         strays, 
        
           What is it that stays so ominous and still, 
                      so walled 
                              that only 
                   pain in trust can breathe             

© 2023 Perdition


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Perdition, I feel this to my soul..

You have wonderful taste in music as well, Perdition...why that title?

Posted 1 Week Ago


Perdition

1 Week Ago

Well if I told you that then all the mystique and mystical nature is lost and what remains is not th.. read more
GlendaK

1 Week Ago

You are absolutely correct, sir, forgive this naive fool, Perdition.
Perdition

1 Week Ago

Jbol…but of course. Never the need be served in forgiveness among poet to poet :)
Powerful lines touching few moments. Nicely written

Posted 2 Months Ago


Perdition

2 Months Ago

Once more my deep appreciation for the read~
i became lost as i read. sometimes we just don't know. lines inside of us get crossed and become blurry greys. deeply poignant and so well described (maybe too well) - concerning and almost scary. bravo.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Perdition

7 Months Ago

I became lost as I read your review as well...so wonderful to hear the effect of a poem I scribbled .. read more
'that only pain in trust can breathe'....I'm stuck on this line. It is the perfect thing to mull over an illusion. This entire writ reminds me of mistrust, false images, trusting only that which is in front, hoping, praying that it's real.

Nicely done. Brevity at t's finest.

Posted 7 Months Ago


Perdition

7 Months Ago

"the perfect thing to mull over an illusion"...now THAT is something of worthiness! Thank you again.. read more
When the world seems out of Focus and everything’s is a skewed and out of order…

Life gets strange sometimes and we feel lost even I our dreams

Posted 8 Months Ago


Perdition

8 Months Ago

Especially in these living dreams, unless of course, we’re asleep; that mad colorful palette of co.. read more
Poetic Beauty

8 Months Ago

You are most welcome. I like reading piece that make me think
Beautiful work. Love the camera metaphor... "when the shutter speed slows to an August breeze..."

Posted 9 Months Ago


Perdition

9 Months Ago

Metaphor?..lol. Thanks for stopping by and for the kind words.
John Sullivan

9 Months Ago

Image, metaphor, whatever. Great piece tho
loved the layout of this piece.
my favorite lines:
"When everything
begins and ends
with midnight"
{the truth behind these words. beautiful.}

Posted 10 Months Ago


Perdition

9 Months Ago

Thanks .. appreciate your comment~
I like your last stanza, I know that feeling at times.
This is well written.

Posted 11 Months Ago


Perdition

11 Months Ago

Thanks..great pen name. We had them in spades in Texas when I lived out of Austin once ago...used a .. read more
When the shutter speed
slows to an August breeze

Capturing something special. A moment in time. Beautifully penned. A short expressive poem which conveys emotion so well. Wonderful whether an illusion or not. That final stanza, quite something.

Chris

Posted 11 Months Ago


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Perdition

11 Months Ago

Happy Holidays Chris and thanks...trying to figure out why my keyboard is acting up but will get the.. read more

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