Perfectly

I'll share with you a

dream I had

sweetly, our bodies pure, poured in

the silver drops of autumn rain

as closely I held you

The window slipped in clouds

pressed and opened to the little things

to the wondrous things

I felt your first kiss of October

the sun flooding in with life  

and all with ease, a touch to guide my hand    

as you were here

all too clearly

I'll share with you a dream I had,

sweetly, the window, as if a glass menagerie

sparkled from the strain

as we were lost in words, undressed

your pulse wet with tears

I loved you then 

the rain held you still, the window slid and

all the worlds we'd never shared fell off into 

the streets beneath us

Perfectly

Author's Note

Reviews

[Amy R]

Oh wow, I loved this passionate yet very very lovely poem.... Those imagery used, like a movie unfolding in my mind as I read this.... I had to read it twice, enjoyed it to much!! I can easily say you "perfected" this perfectly.. 🤍🤍

The very first stanza is my favorite one of all. & the very last stanza as well. Magnificently written. Love felt like magic.. "the silver drops of autumn rain //as closely I held you"

Thanks for sharing this very sensual write..
-Amy

[John Sullivan]

Ahhhhh, love... sensual and very well written. Those silver drops of autumn rain...

[Perdition]

Well, I've heard it's quite the aphrodisiac as well as a "Many Splendored Thing" so composed by Mr. Webster. l. Thanks for the kind read John!

[Shweta]

Each line is perfect.. each word sensational and sensuous.

"As we were lost in words, undressed
your pulse wet with tears"

Keep it up dear poet..

[Perdition]

Thank you Shwetz… as if we ever had a choice… lol. Keep at me and I’ll do my best or at least leave what is left of me writhing for oxygen. Always the greatest of muse … and sleep or food be damned wherever poetry is neglected…lol. A pleasure, always! :)

[Chris Shaw]

One sole visitor prepared to make a comment before I planted mine. This piece deserves many more reviews. It is a beautiful piece of romantic writing. Wonderful lines in the first stanza. Magnificently sensual.

Looking at Ken’s review. Are you the Devil’s spawn? Are poets afraid of you lol.

Chris

[Perdition]

Actually, this poem was inspired on an afternoon when I was watching different versions of Tennessee Williams films… “Cat on a Hot Tin Roof and The Glass Menagerie”(best version starring a very young John Malkovich) I slipped into a dream …. “ Enter the hot dream
Come with us, everything is broken up and dances”… Morrison. Anywho a beautiful young woman was sharing this experience through a rainy collage of sunlight beaming through the clouds and into the bedroom windows but I hope not 🤔🎩… lol. Thanks Chris…people just need time to catch their breath ya know… lol/ just kidding. Very sweet review and appreciated~

[Ken e Bujold]

well i knew it. even the devil's spawn is at heart a closet romantic. damn this is good my friend.

our bodies pure, poured in the silver drops of autumn rain
i felt your first kiss of October
i loved you then/the rain held you still

perfect to go along with listening to Leonard C

ken

[Perdition]

How on earth did I miss this?? Apologies but yep… no cure as of yet and as far as Mr.Cohen… a Fabulous songwriter writer and terribly missed but as far as listening “hallelujah” …many thanks ken!