Think Tall

when you think that you are done

think deeply

think with the earth melting in your teeth

think with the iron sky grinding in your ribs

laboring with the fostered city from your past

think tall

think mountainous

be that seed outnumbered 

deep beneath the stone

wash away your thimble of memory

where you hold an ocean in grain

when you think that you are done

walk the second more 

and with everything you have 

fall in that absence with your knees 

see what strains to stand 

see what curses at the ground

pushing and pounding to get back up

wait out eternity if you must

be a sleeper in the street

but wait and see what will rise, 

when there is nothing but you and death between

think deeply as life is watching too

when you think that you cannot.

Reviews

[NotUsinganymore]

Very deep and meaningful poem! It had a good flow too and I did have to look up the meaning of some words and re reading it again.

[Perdition]

Sorry about that..most do and it sucks that they know where I live ..lol. Thank you Jung Lee...hope the Holidays are going well!

[Cherrie Palmer]

...where there is nothing between you and death... what a powerful phrase

[Perdition]

Ninja worthy?..lol. thank you so much for stopping by Cherrie..I will be by soon ...been up all night so it's time to flop for my daily hour.Looking forward to reading your poetry and thank you kindly...thud! ;)

[Cherrie Palmer]

I really enjoyed your word choices it is even better the second reading.

[Einstein Noodle]

deep and sound wisdom in this says i ... so can relate to the "i can't take it any more" false belief .. ;) we can "take it" ... "life" (in this poem) is for me my Lord Jesus Christ and when i first began to ry to heed that still small voice ..i learned the hard way that in trials ... when we say "no more" ... God seems to say "Ok...i will lift the burden .. you were right at the door .. hand on the door knob .. and just at the doors opening... now, E., we must begin again" ;)))))))))))
lots that i like about your poem .. the use of contrasting images and lines ..i really like the call for a positive attitude in V1 ... and the encouragement to persevere in V2 ... with a strong closing the reinforces the wisdom ... i like the visual of the form you chose as well ... almost like two chapters ..solid blocks and separation tho the actual turn i see is subtle .. nice nice nice job says i!
E.

[Perdition]

Well now, You sir sound like someone that has faced these hard times when you must find a deep strength and spirit and it also sounds like you stood tall and conquered the weight and walked on with a new knowledge and faith and insight that what has risen will continue to rise with grit. Impressive!...a wonderful review E. and much appreciated. Wishing you a Great Thanksgiving!

[Einstein Noodle]

well....we do walk our walks eh!? .....great poem sir! and Happy Thanksgiving to you as well :)

[lightsong]

I strangely found my self pressing my teeth together when I read (think with the earth melting in your teeth).

many of the people who say they want to end their lives, if You put them under death or told them to go ahead and end it, You will see them stopping. if You look into Your past You will see how many times You said You "can't", and somehow You could, You will get surprised of how You did survive. the source of strength is always there as long as there is a breath, this is the mystery.

[Perdition]

Well look who it is...Glad you came around and "many people say you want to end you life" ?? You strangely find me understanding the cultures and the similarities as well as the differences in the things we hold sacred . It is an open site here and to exchange our thoughts and our poetry over the different countries, well that is something that can change the world ya know. I know you do. But a mystery? Hmmm. "Think Deeply" and reverse that line if you wish..
"when there is nothing but you and life between
think deeply as death is watching too"
If you do perhaps the mystery is not such a mystery after all. And be careful with those teeth for crying out loud...they are the only ones you possess for now.

[lightsong]

Well, not so many people like all the people in the world, let me put it ( many of the people who say....) I think it's better that way.

as long as there is a breath flowing inside You, there is a source of strength, that's the power of living and Your holding into life.

[lightsong]

ending "their" life not mine or Yours.

[Perdition]

Yep...definitely an English issue..lol. I'm so sorry Light but understanding what you are saying sometimes I miss the mark because of the language barrier. If you have no breath...you have no life. The strength of life is a curious thing that is usually found when you are challenged. Hard times reveal the truth of your strength and weaknesses ..this poem is about that strength. You must be willing to fall and get back up and build from there from whatever rises..that is now your true self and a better truth to build upon. Breath helps the body of course. Thanks!

[lightsong]

It's my fault, I notice after I leave a review that it's confusing and the process of editing begins.

[Perdition]

No worries..still appreciated and for the most part the point is made and interpreting helps me understand how the poetry is received over our cultural lines. A wonderful thing so thank you so very much!

[lightsong]

well, didn't we agree no speaking of cultural differences ;)

You are always welcome*

[Perdition]

You have true issues with my origins don't ya..lol. We are all from one culture here, Earth and here there are so many cultures and wonderful writers from so many different places..thank you for helping me understand and never again ..I promise? Thanks Light!

[lightsong]

hhaa, no, never I had/have any problem with any origins not Yours or You ;) just smile and write*

[Amy R]

Ah love this poem,
Very very motivational, and speaks with volume!
Keep up the good work! :)

[Perdition]

Thanks for stopping by again and for taking the time to let me know your perception on this one...I'll do my best and thank you for the friend invite....surrounding myself with inspirational poets will help m. Truly enjoyed your poem as well so i ask that that you do the same.

[Perdition]

*me.......

[Amy R]

Aww, you're welcome, of course, being around inspirational poets are really nice....so I can say the same for you.

[Perdition]

Waiting?..lol. Thanks! "Now lets keep this money machine rolling!!" Or you know..do some inspired writing ;) then eat Turkey!!

[Amy R]

ahaha, will keep in mind! ;)
Happy Thanksgiving!

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved this poem. Great energy and great wisdom shared. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[Perdition]

A pleasure to see you again Coyote Poetry...do me a favor and tell Crippled Queen would ya..lol. Just kidding she is one of the remarkable as well as your poetry and I will be by later today to review and enjoy your artistry. As always thank you for the kind words. Means a lot coming from an inspired writer.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked this one and you are welcome.

[LazerRays]

Perserverence!!! A great moral to go on! This was upbeat to read and reminded a hype up speech to psyche you in the game. It's like youre telling them to get their head and the game and fight it through. I like the flow of this and how you carefully transition through the lines. The setup is neat and I find no fault! Nice job!

[Perdition]

Oh wow..I didn't see you Sarah..sorry. My eyes suck now. I am telling them that..good eye and I would expect no less from such a wonderful talent. Can't wait to see what becomes. :)

[LazerRays]

Hahahaha! That's quite alright! Tell your bad eye I'm disappointed hahahaha! ;) Im also curious to see where this goes. Message me if you add on so I know to look :P

[Perdition]

I will but I think it's done...just had a couple of hiccups that I though needed ironing but who knows...I'll give it time to do its thing and we'll see. Thanks Sarah!

[LazerRays]

Hahahahaha! No problem! I'll stop by again soon!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Well, how fitting is this for my Monday morning soul searching of endurance. A weeping without sorrow. A sweeping tissue of strength! How well you know the need. Im strapping in..tomorrow begins the prep for scope and then colonoscopy, Thanksgiving baking, love, laughter, floured hair, dirty apron, but above all blessing. I am so Thankful for your being! Happy Thanksgiving!

[Perdition]

Wiping a tear back..Sniff..sniff..SHUT UP! Happy Thanksgiving you "too much information giver"..lol. seriously though, shaman will be there so keep an eye out. Hell, keep two :) Peace!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I'll be waiting with bells on...well oxygen, drugs, an empty gut, and open dreamtime....still too much info?

[Perdition]

Only if I read it..so nope. ;) Wait..DRUGS?!..lol.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

There you go picking at perfection! lol

[Perdition]

Oh come on..it's done now..better or worse?

[Perdition]

I think it flows better

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

are you sure your done?

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I didn't cry this time..this version doesn't move me to emotion..it still makes me think and pause throughout but what makes them great...powerful is that movement... I'll move away from it..read it again in the morning...maybe the day has made me too hard.

[Perdition]

DAMN YO!!..lol. yes I am sure but for you I will put it back if within 2 days you think the same. starting now. MARK IT!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

awww! So you wrote this just for me? lol

[Perdition]

The world Chico and everyone in it..so yep. Smiles!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I will dream of it then...

[Perdition]

Happy!..lol.

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Okay so let me see the other one again....I am not sure why but it's the ending of this one...it still doesn't move me like the original but the ending of this leaves me frumpy...could be that I can't eat today because of this procedure tomorrow and I have to drink a gazillion gallons of liquid...but...

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I'll be back later in the day...have a Mimi thing that I must attend...keep dreaming...i will return,

[Perdition]

Yep..you''re frumpy as I did not change the ending...but good to know and thanks...now be safe and think positive as positive will overpower all. Well everything shy of me of course :p

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

I'm trying but I haven't eaten since yesterday and now I am getting cranky...gotta start a prep solution( it's horrible) in two hours...How about I take a nap and you come feed it to me in dreamtime...some food for thought :)

[Perdition]

consider it done...only that food is a poetry reading? and you get the sleep you need..please!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

The reading was just the food I needed. I made it through. YOU can keep this one as is for A Thanksgiving treat but that next one coming is a coming ...so no picking and plucking the good stuff out :) To the moon and back Alice!...to the moon...

[Perdition]

Why yuzzz I Outta.!!