A Mended Kiss I Regive

"From Your Lips To Mine:" an edited version

There are many woods ahead

and the indigent rains will smile

the crop of sky in her dark winter’s robe

weeping her way back home

yet here is where I often stop

my head as distant as I came

hard beneath the branches

and I know

tomorrow grows so much deeper than I realize

the hunger from my starving well

 

your beating heart groans beneath strings of white marrow

black tangled braids operate through my cavernous chest

as I become the silence in your silent room,

watching, waiting

my mirror images at play

your breasts pressed into the moon’s tongue

 

there are teams of horses still here tonight

nocturnal hooves galloping through wet and open dream

beating my mind where I did not intend

 

and absence is our redemption

a promise I made long ago

a promise I gave to the end

and in the end what deeper bond should I regret

what deeper depth, regrets me still,

 

it is in this the mire I adore your love

in the want where we are torn

delicate as delicate knows our name

 

and you are warm

A question hovering  the covers in my empty bed

and beautiful as an

arrow about to strike

hours before the taste of shame completes its journey

I will crawl, a wild lion anesthetized

I will slow my breath in the snare you have designed

 

my sight commanding to a darkness

as light is merely a want and wistful glow

indulgent in my sorrows

and who am I to sleep within the sun

and who am I to love with hands unable

where our life remains reliant

on the hours of little things

Author's Note

A curious edit, though which if either preferred ?

Reviews

[Amy R]

The title again caught me by the hand, I love this poem, very soft, yet so lovable... 🌸🤍🤍
This poem reflects on the tension between yearning and the harsh realities of love, hinting at a deep connection that is marked by both beauty and sorrow.
Your word choices are quite well, rich in imagery to.. & The use of alliteration in "beating my mind" adds a rhythmic quality to the poem,..
Thanks for sharing such an original poem..
-Amy

[Perdition]

Once more to the rescue she arrives in the dust of time before I dive off the cliff and into the useless agony I call poetry. Oh, I'll tell myself I belong but truth be known...Nah..let the truth find its own cradle and cliff, we poets have richer fish to fry. Never quite know how to respond to such insight as yours but I do believe you can see the beast beneath the poem and so I am eternally grateful. On another thought, what lengths I've taken to hide all this, so what the *#[email protected] Much appreciation for your wonderful words and midday visitation...Nope!, still jumping...lol ;). I'll eventually be normal but no promises. Happy Friday and Namaste Amy!

[Amy R]

You are sure right, I can see the beast(won't refer it so) but quoting you, beneath the poems,.. I do enjoy your words very much, something about the way you write.... Namaste! U know me a little more than some, strange but I'd leave it to energy.
YOU;RE WELCOME. Hugs😉🤗🤗 Keep good !

[GlendaK]

breasts pressed into the moon’s tongue...That stopped me in my tracks. I was just gong to zip through but I'll definitely need to return to read more in depth...when my thought clear wow...thanks for the bedtime snack

[Perdition]

A poet that sleeps? Who knew? By all means please do return as many of these rewrites have the curve of time and time grows over me lately in slow beats and images that I should have always carried with me like the sound of sudden hooves sunk deep into their journey and purpose ….the call is unforgettable as much as unforgiving. Be nice to have a critical opinion from someone that writes from the well. But on your own time and wish of course. Till then thank you for the kind words and for not being fearful of the name. It merely refers to the process we experience, night after night as poets adhered to life and all its forms and forces that capture us whole ~

[GlendaK]

Who said I was "sleeping"? I said bedtime snack ;)
Nah, I was reading quickly before I head out the door. "breasts pressed into the moon's tongue" I love it. Perdition.

[Shweta]

Nice write dear poet. As always..!

[Perdition]

A rare and wonderful visit from a dear friend. A pleasure as always. Hope the world is spinning immaculate, for you and yours. Now, back to writing for both of us okay? Hugs and smiles as always!

[Onlyme]

There is a perfect romantic uncomplicated type of love here. Pure and simple. Yet undying and unyielding. Forever and beyond. That time that makes you smile and feel great and warm inside and out.

[Perdition]

I could not agree with you more with such a wonderful review, "uncomplicated" being the greatest fuel to all minutes of romance. "Well it's a marvelous night for a moon dance with the stars up above in your eyes" as Van Morrison sang. Thank you ..think I'll go play with some night autumn leaves..lol.

[Simone Davis]

I read this and re read it, I imagined a perfect NB tyoe of love,vthe perfect touch, the perfect night just perfect.

[Perdition]

So glad I could hear that and WHAT a lifelong pursuit it is, makes you appreciate these minutes all the more. A wonderful review ...sending you the wonders atop wonders

[Alisa Js]

Sending lots of Aloha across the land and sea...

This one captures the essence of your style and voice over the other, and goes without saying is hauntingly beautiful in a catch-your-breath kind of way. In other words, exquisite. And also, true to form as is most of your eloquent writing, this one resonates on multiple levels and degrees across the spectrum.

My vote goes here.


Catch up soon,

Alisa ;-)

[Perdition]

lol...Of course it does (your vote). Hey you. Thanks and as always hoping you are finding some new and inspiring places to write as well as read both inside and out. Till soon..thanks!

[Alisa Js]

Thank you for your kind thoughts as they are always appreciated. I am purging the emotional fallout from recent events... and noticed the tone is way toooo dark!

Time for another perspective! lol

I find it utterly fascinating the range of responses this piece evokes from those who have left reviews.

A microcosm of the larger impact your work will certainly have. Mark my words, my friend.

Catch up soon.

Alisa ;-)

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

A regiven kiss? what oddity is that? a kiss given is new each time...your sounding like you've coined them or something...I think I may like this one better and yes I shall always tell you .......the lie is easy like the little things but they never soften the lessening. THere will be more but my moments are revolving doors ...stuck on swirl

[Perdition]

Absolutely new every time...ABSOLUTELY .. but much better than the other titles I was considering in order to reveal it as a rewrite or edit. As far as the swirl..well some of the greatest times I've ever realized have been swirls, just didn't know it at the time. I may still actually be in one right now ;)

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

My lips your kiss...its simply an unknown lover or love or want or need...you are right it could be just about anything or anything could be about it...swirl~

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

stay outta the nighttime Autumn leaves...they are trying to sleep...swirl swirl swirl....

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

A beautiful read for me. One that I could interpret in many personal ways. The penultimate verse reads stunning. Very appreciated.

[Perdition]

And the winner for the best ever use of the word "penultimate" by a reviewer/writer EVER goes to Dhara!!!!!...I kid you not. NEVER been used once before and it used so laid back and casually tossed. That is the any one have ever used it in a one of reviews,,, first time I haver ever had anyone use that in one of my poetry reviews. Seriously ! This one is is by far my new favorite sly verbage...Never been used??....I kid u not. Oh! and thank you so much! Sorry ...I just never hear that word and it's of my favorite and I have no idea why...maybe because it is so rarely used? Great Review! now I'm Giddy!..lol. Seriously... thank you Dhara!!! You made my night!! No kidding and I I"m sure you think I am....I kid NOT!Sorry for the enthusiasm ..SERIOUSLY, FIRST TIME!! Thank you~

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Awww...It’s a pleasure, dear Perdition :) I’m feeling very clever now (strokes her dog-eared Miriam & Webster; smiles slyly)

[Perdition]

And the winner for the best ever use of the word "penultimate" by a reviewer/writer EVER goes to Dhara!!!!!...I kid you not. NEVER been used once before and it used so laid back and casually tossed. That is the any one have ever used it in a one of reviews,,, first time I haver ever had anyone use that in one of my poetry reviews. Seriously ! This one is is by far my new favorite sly verbage...Never been used??....I kid u not. Oh! and thank you so much! Sorry ...I just never hear that word and it's of my favorite and I have no idea why...maybe because it is so rarely used? Great Review! now I'm Giddy!..lol. Seriously... thank you Dhara!!! You made my night!! No kidding and I I"m sure you think I am....I kid NOT!Sorry for the enthusiasm ..SERIOUSLY... FIRST TIME!! Thanks!

[Perdition]

Okay pleasure's all mine and no idea what just happened here but thank God no one's eye socket got popped out right?...shrugging shoulders...coffee? :p lol.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Haha! I’m relieved! Thanks for the coffee :)))