The Challenge

An arrow into the air for Halloween.

If from 

some cold, damp, weary distance

you have felt my touch

 

my name, 

my promise

each sweeping blow

a slight of pendulum

 

just as you are breaking

same as I

 

if you can taste your

final breath with swollen tears 

neglected

 

each word you pray a final promise, 

left frozen on your lips

hold back 

if only one more hour

 

I will wait till late November

when the day grows dark and thin

and all your sins are mine to gather

As shadows mark the stone

quietly in a southern field

where the gray light swallows all my vested wounds

 

I will come, come late November

and together we will lay among the shallows

two names pledged for ever more

Reviews

[barleygirl]

WOW! This is great! I forgot the Halloween aspect & I was just reading it as a great poem that seemingly throws down a Romeo-and-Juliet dual-suicide challenge perhaps? But remembering Halloween now, I also love that this is a fresh approach to such writing. The best part of this is the way your words & lines have a haunting quality & especially toward the end, repeating the "November" lines, very twisted, like a cross between a threat & a promise. Nicely spooky (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Perdition]

My favorite time of everything...I was just a bit influenced by a certain Poe fan of ours that uses the mark of Sarah amongst her names I believe ...a wonderful inspiration of ours at at a wonderful that of year has learned not to waste the perfect amount of time a a certain time of year ...and a bit spooky too but in a good way..lol. Thank you Margie...there's no keeping up with is there?..lol. Hugs!

[barleygirl]

I still have a pile of reading in my library which is no doubt peppered with Halloween pieces, so I won't be letting go of this genre yet! *smile*

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Bound by the heartbreaking darkness of love...and they always make it seem like roses. pfft thorns....Its the heavy handedness of the air as of late...we need some whispy winds before then, I think...

[Perdition]

Well my great grandmother was a wind sweeper/whisperer so I've be known to wisp a wind or two in my years...want me to talk to the sycamore or the mountain hawk? Or you want to run those woods yourself? Thank you Queen..as always..WONDERFUL to have you bacK if only for the day!

[Gypsy Warrior Queen]

Well hopefully not just one day, yes busy week with Hallo approaching but colonoscopy& scope not til Thanksgiving and uncertain date on foot surgery yet. Sometime maybe before Christmas...maybe...

[Perdition]

Okay..the ancient spirits love this sort of commitment..lol. Take care of yourself for all saint's sake. This site would be a travesty w/out ya,

[LazerRays]

Romance and Halloween? And interexting mix I must say. Why not? This was a great concoction of the two :)
this is also a mix of my strength and one of my Achilles heels (creepinessy strength js) haha.

[Perdition]

Laughing, Yeah I though you might find this one interesting. After your review of "Never Ending" I just had to give it a try. Thank you for the inspiration and for the title as it was trule a challenge to your review on that poem. Also glad I could hit upon both your weakness and strengths~I'd hate to miss that mark,,Happy Halloween!!!

[LazerRays]

Hahaha! Glad my creepiness drew someone in for a change lmao. You did really well on this ;)
ouch- had to use my weakness eh? Hahaaaha! You jerk! Hahaha

[Perdition]

PS..kinda weird you were the number 66 here.Coincidence? I think not...lol~

[LazerRays]

That's 666 but close enough. I'll have to admit it... I'm the devil hahaha. But hey, if the devil likes your poetry, you've got good advirtisement ;)

[Perdition]

Jerk? Hey, I just tossed out a poem for you for crying out loud..and I left out a six for safe keeping as well. The things I do for my fellow poets....rolling eyes..hahaha. Okay heading for Sarah Allen Poe land to read and review. Thanks again for that whole hell thing :)

[LazerRays]

Of course! Anytime! (don't get trapped in Poe land.... It sucks the life force put of you) if ya wanna give your devil friend a holler, feel free anytime hahaha